V-Day, Belated

V-Day, Belated

A Poem by Allen Smuckler











Anatomically sound, befitting a king

swaying alertly in the waves, I sing.

Hearts, at sea, floundering and pounding

against the cavity of my chest, astounding.

 

V-Day arriving, and leaving without me

swimming with shellfish and sharks at sea.

Satisfying love’s unique quality,

and breathlessly waiting for me to be we.

 

Tortuously lying in the keel’s utter mist

waves exploding above, below and amidst.

contemplating all that I ever wished,

remembering when, at first we last kissed.

 

V-Day, a special enchanting display,

lovingly speeding, though slightly astray.

Wishing you love in a happiness way,

throughout a belated Valentine’s Day.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

February 15, 2009

© 2012 Allen Smuckler


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Allen Smuckler
written: February 15, 2009

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Oh beautifully penned. I love the romantic flowing tides throughout this lovely Valentine's poem. Thanks for submitting to the contest! ~ Helena

Posted 11 Years Ago


oh ,nice ,playful, like you are moving the words by magical way! I liked this expression much :
remembering when, at first we last kissed.


Posted 12 Years Ago


Very beautifully expressed.
This is one of the best Valentine Poems i've read.
Though am reading it really late

Posted 12 Years Ago


This" very pretty and I love how you compared it to the sea. Very nice =)

Posted 12 Years Ago


Lovely poem, romantic and emotional. definitely based on true life experience and emotions. Very sentimental and touching of long time lovers meeting again. Well rhymed and timed. I enjoyed it especially its rhythm and flow plus timing. the syllables are well arranged bringing this quiet yet powerful poem to full bloom with the rhyming ending. Well done again.

Posted 12 Years Ago


I really like this and the fact of the words "belated Valentine's Day" in the poem just like the title, and the date the poem was written. Nice. I like the imagery in this.

Posted 12 Years Ago


I would like to offer an alternative to the first stanza, so that the pattern of "same end sound to all four lines" could be consistent:

"Befitting a King, anatomically sound
"In the waves is where my soul's fulness abounds
"When at sea, does my heart, though wearied, yet pound
"Within the walls of my chest, it strongly resounds."

I know. Really, I do: Presumptuous as hell of me. It's not like it's not already a beautiful piece. It IS! But where I see a pattern with a chink in it, something sweeps over me NEEDING to fix it. Sorry...



Posted 12 Years Ago


A day to be etched in stone.Where they so different from us ? Sure seems so

Posted 12 Years Ago


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tee hee hee that was wicked so beautifully written with a perfect flow :3

Posted 12 Years Ago


A great Valentine's poem, very romantic. I really enjoyed reading this, it has a nice rhythm to it that made it fun to read.

Posted 12 Years Ago



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Allen Smuckler
Allen Smuckler

Sarasota, FL



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I'm a poet, a singer, a peaceful gunslinger.. looking to share my poetry..and a little bit of me...if I dare I 've been writing since I was 18.... am slightly older now, and still trying to fin.. more..

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