There I was (Light & Thunder)
A Poem by
Allen Smuckler
There I was
(Light and Thunder)
There I was
minding my business
when in you walked
set right down
and made my heart beat
like it was twenty one.
I saw the light
and felt the thunder
colliding into space
the world a beautiful place
and all that came before
meant nothing any more.
I turned around an evolution
while you slept beside me
took light from the womb
revolutionized the day
and scratched the itch
in my heart.
Amid the glorious light
and the furious thunder
and without warning
I lost my way, then
in you walked
and I was found.
As the windows shook
and my soul was lifted
from core to shining core
there I was
lost no more
among the light and thunder.
© 2011 Allen Smuckler
Author's Note
It's been a while...It's great to be back
Written: December 13, 2011
Photo: Siesta Key, Florida (October 15, 2011)
Reviews
Beautiful photo and poem. Love the imagery. Very very nice.
Posted 12 Years Ago
Hmmmmm. Beautiful imagery, and somewhat peaceful, for some reason. :) Lovely piece of poetry.
Posted 12 Years Ago
Hmmmmm. Beautiful imagery, and somewhat peaceful, for some reason. :) Lovely piece of poetry.
An interesting take on an old theme...Usually, the thunderstorm, with its rain and shrieking winds, is reserved for the bad days, late in the relationship, but you have taken the gut-rumbling, eye-blinding power and equated them to the overwhelming sensations of newly-found love.
A Note of Caution (with tongue deeply in cheek): Beware of those hailstones--they're up there!
Posted 12 Years Ago
An interesting take on an old theme...Usually, the thunderstorm, with its rain and shrieking winds, is reserved for the bad days, late in the relationship, but you have taken the gut-rumbling, eye-blinding power and equated them to the overwhelming sensations of newly-found love.
A Note of Caution (with tongue deeply in cheek): Beware of those hailstones--they're up there!
That was wonderful: your phrasing is impeccable and elegant, and the poem itself was uplifting in the most fantastic way.
"and scratched the itch
in my heart."
Incredible imagery. Well done.
Posted 12 Years Ago
That was wonderful: your phrasing is impeccable and elegant, and the poem itself was uplifting in the most fantastic way.
"and scratched the itch
in my heart."
Incredible imagery. Well done.
The light from womb and itch of heart I loved these images, the way you penned such depth of love and need was touching, the whole idea she is the very essence required to feel once more alive is beautiful, welcome back and keep em' coming
Posted 13 Years Ago
The light from womb and itch of heart I loved these images, the way you penned such depth of love and need was touching, the whole idea she is the very essence required to feel once more alive is beautiful, welcome back and keep em' coming
This is beautiful Allen. I was ready to grab the hankies but only for the love of tender love story that touched my heart. I could feel every word written. And I wondered to myself, I want someone to feel that way about me one day. You captured this with such style and grace. I loved reading it and its one of my favs now. Thanks for sharing an amazing poem.
Posted 13 Years Ago
This is beautiful Allen. I was ready to grab the hankies but only for the love of tender love story that touched my heart. I could feel every word written. And I wondered to myself, I want someone to feel that way about me one day. You captured this with such style and grace. I loved reading it and its one of my favs now. Thanks for sharing an amazing poem.
Beautiful piece of poetry...flow perfect!!
"I lost my way, then
in you walked
and I was found."
Says so much just in that...
Posted 13 Years Ago
Beautiful piece of poetry...flow perfect!!
"I lost my way, then
in you walked
and I was found."
Says so much just in that...
and scratched the itch
in my heart.
Saw the light and felt the thunder....BAM....there she is...she/love...AWESOME!!!
I love that...this was so beautiful...love can be cool like that...
Glad your back, always enjoy reading your work.
Posted 13 Years Ago
and scratched the itch
in my heart.
Saw the light and felt the thunder....BAM....there she is...she/love...AWESOME!!!
I love that...this was so beautiful...love can be cool like that...
Glad your back, always enjoy reading your work.
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Allen Smuckler Sarasota, FL
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I'm a poet, a singer, a peaceful gunslinger..
looking to share my poetry..and a little bit of me...if I dare
I 've been writing since I was 18.... am slightly older now, and still trying to fin..
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