help(less)

Just felt like reposting for my "new" friends... Old friends can read too if you'd like

i fe(he)el    so ( lp

           less)           

in

a world of 

turmo &

                  il gr (ief

but

(i pray)              f

 o

   r

lo (&)                      i feel  atease (ve)

(on)to (ly

b

  e

dis/ by  heart/ the  ened/

sounds

       of

guns!! (he) th (lp) e

 

 o

w  ld    by  h        h

  r e     c

l   a

ping e - ;

o

  t

    h

       e

  r.

Author's Note

another stab at e.e. cummings
written February 15, 1968
picture.. Brookgreen Gardens...Litchfield Beach, South Carolina (summer 2008)

Reviews

[Ruth]

Did indeed re-read! lol Thrilling...when you read a few times, you really engage in the way the words were meant to be felt, wonderful! xoxo

[KAREN]

Nicely penned! Different for me, but that is good because I learned a new way to write.

[reflectingus]

Wow! I was a bit confused at first, but then it flowed, I could understand the depth of that structure as I read the poem, and its connotation expressed perfectly through that helpless feeling, and being confused and lost. This poem has taken expressions to a much greater level, this is so unique. And now it all makes sense, including the picture, and I don't know if you meant to do that, but perhaps you were trying to make the structure of the poem vaguely outline that picture? Literally? I'm very amazed by the amount of talent you possess, this is very unique and flawlessly accentuates that (he)lple(ss) feeling!

[Cassie Fraga]

yes I agree with Raven!!! the structure helps the reader really grasp the broken feeling... this was a great piece my friend!!!

[Raven Starhawk]

I love how this feels broken. When you feel helpless though that is how it really feels. O_O

[rosemary keogh]

That is brill. love it

[Sahar moonlight]

My mind is puzzled. I felt so help(less) while reading this poem.
But so interesting it was.

Thanks for reposting!

[Shy Girl]

I had to read that one twice to figure out the wording...THAT WAS NEAT!!! I was actually "Help(less)" in understanding how you did that...but I soooo did not give up the quest..lol You teach me new ways of expression everytime you RR me to read a piece. This message is so loud and clear once you figure out the wording used. I like how it makes you WANT to figure it out, makes you HAVE to figure it out, makes you MUCH more than you were before you read it...Thank you for the RR :)

[Chris]

chuckling here... sometimes you NEED a difference to BE - a difference.

[Mary C]

your words are always super creative, and certainly unique, in structure and style!