help(less)

Just felt like reposting for my "new" friends... Old friends can read too if you'd like

i fe(he)el    so ( lp

           less)           

in

a world of 

turmo &

                  il gr (ief

but

(i pray)              f

 o

   r

lo (&)                      i feel  atease (ve)

(on)to (ly

b

  e

dis/ by  heart/ the  ened/

sounds

       of

guns!! (he) th (lp) e

 

 o

w  ld    by  h        h

  r e     c

l   a

ping e - ;

o

  t

    h

       e

  r.

Author's Note

another stab at e.e. cummings
written February 15, 1968
picture.. Brookgreen Gardens...Litchfield Beach, South Carolina (summer 2008)

Reviews

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

You make readers stop when coming upon this poem; to either not read or to read but only once.
I enjoy the play with structure within is, how you shape words with the flow and message just like the statue itself in the photo. Good job.

[smilempsn]

Well yesh, Indeed it was more readable from
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and words are put up together beautifully.. nice work :)

[allie_arrowz]

this one was a little harder to read, but the fact that it is kind of went with the message, which was really cool. putting the format and message together i mean. :)

[Rose of Gondor]

I like the way your formatted this.

Everyone of us wants to make a difference in this cruel word. And we can, if we all help each other. A beautiful poem with a beautiful message!

[An owl on the moon]

It's a visionary piece that makes one stop, take a breath, and view the world through the twists and turns of your art form... Beautifully expressive and rich with the value of helping each other... May we learn and move forward...

[Sugar Plum ♥]

Oh nice and provocative game of words and graphic!! I like this kind of poem-games...It makes me awake! and contains hidden message : yes
Help the world by helping each other!! is the help for reading the poem included? :)
~nia~

[_]

two things:
one: what an absolutely gorgeous statue it displays the point of the support in a time of struggle
two: what an interesting way to write a poem i loved very creative :D

[Katelyn]

original and interesting structure. simple and beautiful. great job!

[zero binty]

Skimmed through it the first time. Second time, the words started to show. Third time, the sentences started to form. Infinite times later, the multiple messages keep coming. Thank you.

[Leslie Philibert]

Clever,well written concrete poem, that forces the reader to be careful, good writing.