Glorious Discovery

Title: by Kate... poem: by Us picture: by me....Siesta Keys, FL (Sarasota)

Love’s presence 

fades 

like twilight 

falling. 

Darkness and 

dread become 

my companion, 

as fear 

turns to fright 

and all within me 

near withers. 

The circle of life 

and living, 

brings about 

the promise, 

and hope 

of a new 

inspirational day. 

And I smile now while sitting 

at the kitchen table 

Reawakening 

to the light. 

I’ll mark on 

the calendar, 

the genesis of 

the day’s discovery; 

happiness and love 

found once more. 

As we wait 

hand in hand 

for the twilight, 

night turns 

to dawn... 

Such is the magic 

and beauty 

of life... 

 

     

Author's Note

Thanks for seeing me through this process til the end...now go back to bed...
allen

Reviews

[Sukriti Suki]

I like it the way it is...it flows well with the rest of the piece..

[?]

As we wait
hand in hand
for the twilight,
night turns
to dawn...
Such is the magic
and beauty
of life...

This is endings of all endings, beautiful, sums it all up

[Allen Smuckler]

I want to thank everyone who took the time to read and respond, not only to this the final version, but to all the previous ones as well, starting with the original "Discovery". The majority of you felt "As we wait hand in hand for the twilight, night turns to dawn...such is the magic and beauty of life"...ends and fits the poem best. Kate and I agree (though we love the other version as well). As kate so eloquently stated "it leaves me with a feeling of awe and wonderment at the majesty of life...a life of glorious discovery...

[Kate Little]

Hello friend! It's wonderful to read all of the feedback here, Allen. Just wonderful.

I truly like both options and I remember us going to and fro on this .... mingle and jingle ... remember?!!! If I remember rightly, I think we ended up preferring the second option ie

As we wait
hand in hand
for the twilight,
night turns to dawn...
Such is the magic
and beauty
of life


For me, ending this way, leaves me with a feeling of awe and wonderment at the magesty of life ... a life of glorious discovery....

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

I like the first one myself...........

[Cherrie]

(As we wait
hand in hand
for the twilight,
night turns
to dawn...
Such is the magic
and beauty
of life... )

[Kyla H]

Very moving and beautiful, well done.

[Coffee Vampier]

both lines are very good but i like this one most
wait
hand in hand
for the twilight,
night turns
to dawn...
Such is the magic
and beauty
of life... )

Either way you slice it it's a very beautiful poem :)

[Coyote Poetry]

I like both lines. But the below one is my favorite.
"As we wait
hand in hand
for the twilight,
night turns
to dawn...
Such is the magic
and beauty
of life... )"
A beautiful poem. The things we think about with coffee at the kitchen table. I enjoyed the complete poem. A very good ending to a excellent poem.
Coyote

[Sunni Davis]

I prefer "Such is the magic and beauty of life. As we wait for twilight, night turns to dawn...hand in hand" It seems to flow nicer that way.