Sun

The brilliance of the burning Sun

beats down heavily,

in the presence of solitude;

in the presence of the Lord.

The ripples of waves

emerging from concrete,

shows the wickedness

of this

The Monstrous Sphere.

 

I can’t wait ‘til

that blinding Sun

d

  r

   o

       p

        s

and could care less

if it ever

e

s

o

r

again!

While it heats the earth

so boldly,

from this day

until

eeettteeerrrnnniiittttyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyy....

 

Why do I hate the

Sun?

when life can not exist

without it..

and death

can not exit

with it.

The glowing Sun will always remain.

 

But should the

Sun

s

     e    

         t

for good

and I am driven into

darkness

I know not to be afraid

for I’ll still have a glittering

warmness.

 

Author's Note

written November 1, 1967...Refurbished May 15, 2010
The write and the edit were 43 years apart.
I am anxious to hear honest critiques on this one (for a number of reasons)..please and thanks,
allen

Reviews

[Mark]

Enjoyed your cummings-esque treatments of s se, Allen.
e o
t and r Kind of fun to contemplate what eeeeeeeterrrrrrrnityyyyyyyyy might bring, even though we'll not be here to enjoy it. Also glad to have a brother here, posting (because he SAVED!!) his old stuff...I've gotten some derisive leers, at the age of some of my posts, you betcha!

ps: My typed comment obviously didn't translate to the printed version--Sorry!

[shoaib]

great writing and compostion
the great thing about this is the space between start and finish
its great to look back at your old self
but proof read with the smarter you huh
awesome job man

[Vanny]

Why do I hate the

Sun?

when life can not exist

without it..

and death
can not exit

with it.

The glowing Sun will always remain.



But should the

Sun

s

e

t

Brilliantly written. Flows great, and was well written. -S...