Paradise

Paradise

A Poem by Allen Smuckler
"

....a little slice of paradise...to restart the engine..:)

"

Osprey flood-pathed junctures

in the

middle

of Paradise.

Overexposed and diluted

by the

sounds

of the missing heartbeat

and the

loneliness

of the beakless egret

we all feel.

 

The expression of

the sunlit

reflective pool,

for the

paradise

we know and sense

and understand.

Not quite at the

end of

earth,

but almost.

 

While the ball

of fire

exposed and

diminished,

flourishes to the

very end., and

awakens on the beaches

of Casey Key,

toward the dusk of

the beautiful day

in paradise…

I smile

© 2011 Allen Smuckler


Author's Note

Allen Smuckler
February 23, 2011
Picture: Lovers Keys, Bonita springs, Fla. Jan. 26, 2010 (Just an Osprey digging his existence) and me.

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What do you suppose it is like to be a predatory bird on he wing I think I would like it

Posted 13 Years Ago


A beautiful and peaceful read. Well written with great flow and imagery.

Posted 13 Years Ago


Your rating is not high enough, better fix that 100/100 for being talented and for being a good friend. On a serious note, I like how you are inspired by simple things in nature, you make even more amazing and real. :)

Posted 13 Years Ago


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This was wonderfully written, you do have a way of making your poems come alive so to say.
With the picture you have painted in my mind, I am feeling very tranquil/relaxed right now. Makes me want a margarita, ;)

Posted 13 Years Ago


I enjoyed the field trip in your words. I like the peace of a lonely place where you can find new friends to enjoy the peace. A very nice ending to a excellent poem.
Coyote

Posted 13 Years Ago


' the poem finished with 'I smile' and that describes the feeling I get from reading it :)

Posted 13 Years Ago


What a tranquil feeling to be near the end of the earth with the setting of the sun and peaceful waters

Posted 13 Years Ago


Love the structure of this poem.

Of the missing heartbeat.. (love that line)
Beautiful day in paradise, I smile (yes, wonderful ending to a well written poem)
I really enjoyed reading it.

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Posted 13 Years Ago


Excellent penning and description. Great job.
♥ Ta'Shandra

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Posted 13 Years Ago


The original pirate of the high seas a handsome image of grace in flight

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Posted 13 Years Ago



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Allen Smuckler
Allen Smuckler

Sarasota, FL



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I'm a poet, a singer, a peaceful gunslinger.. looking to share my poetry..and a little bit of me...if I dare I 've been writing since I was 18.... am slightly older now, and still trying to fin.. more..

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