The Day's Discovery

I changed the title and the order..but essentially the poem remains the same... photo: Bonita Springs, Fla, winter of 2010

Love’s presence

fades
like twilight
falling.
Darkness and
dread become
my companion,
as fear
turns to fright
and all within me
near withers.
The circle of life
and living,
brings about
the promise,
and hope
of a new
inspirational day.
And I smile now while sitting
at the kitchen table
Reawakening
to the light.
I’ll mark on
the calendar,
the genesis of
the day’s discovery;
happiness and love
found once more.
Such is the magic
and beauty
of life.
As we wait for
the twilight,
night turns
to dawn …
hand in hand

 

Author's Note

Sooo, This is my tweak to Kate Little's rewrite of Twilight's Discovery.
There is a "Discovering Twilight 3" but it has to do with a decision on the last line...
I've asked enough of you so I won't go there.....yet. However we are looking for which one works best..sort of a vote...obviously no pressure but if you want to ..feel free. BTW Kate Little is from Australia and I'm from the U.S...amazing what people can do together when they put their mind to it. (reactions welcome)
allen

Reviews

[Sunni Davis]

I,too, like this one above the others, though all are well written. I like the flow and mood of this version. Very nicely done,Allen and Kate!

[.......]

This is really a wonderful and beautiful write.
I enjoyed this gem of a piece.

[TJ]

Allen I've been a fan of all of these but in my opinion this version works best in almost every way. Flow. Format. Imagery. I don't claim to be a professional judge of poetry or even a good judge but I vote for this one

[Kate Little]

Hi there, Allen!

Thank you for telling me you were here and that you've posted these. It was a pleasure to work with you on this .... just amazing what we can do from across the other side of the world! Life is just full of glorious discovery, is it not?

Well done you.

[KimLove "The Beautiful ..]

Allen, it was perfect before and it is still perfect now. Aww Bonita Springs I have not been there in quite awhile. Nice job Allen

[Lily Mae]

The circle of life and a promise of a new day... :) You can't beat that... I love it..x

[?]

Im really liking this version, as the ending is most perfect.

[Ruth]

Goodness! The more I read, the more enthralled I become! Allen....this is a masterpiece...no other word!
xx

[Brad]

another beaut of a rendition, allen, you keep digging deeper...gonna get a nose bleed soon... :)

[LA Lorena]

I vote for this version as well. A great collaborative effort! Well done!