Unknown Voyage

first published piece in college newspaper.

Set sail for an unknown voyage,

Deep, deep, deep within my mind.

A book without a written page.

An actor without the Broadway stage.

 

Drift, drift, drift, for thirty score.

Forget all life; forget mankind.

Delve, indagate, search and explore,

the coming of peace and the end of war.

 

Enter now, what will be the end.

Only the cruel are left behind.

Trapped in a world that will transcend,

With phonies and liars, too hard to mend.

 

We’ll set sail for that mystical place,

Where never a word is said unkind.

Gaze, gaze, gaze without a trace

Upon war and hate and pure disgrace.

 

To enter my mind, I will admit

Is like entering the sea totally blind.

Sink, sink, sink within the travelled pit.

No one knows how you will benefit.

 

Rest, rest, rest in that silken bed.

The trip you’re on is hard to define.

You’re aware of your trunk, your limbs, your head.

Not quite the voyage; my travelers...we're dead.

 

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

December 7, 1968 (19 years old)
First posted on April 19, 2011 and still, nary a peep. I wonder why that is.
90+ views...It's ok to comment, if it sucks too. That's how we improve...
writers??
I did tweak the last line..but I'm open to any and all suggestions.

Reviews

[Leslie Philibert]

I like this, quatrain verses with a couplet rhyme scheme, like the imagery too, especially the second line with the strong repeats. Don`t change it - first thoughts are often the best.It`s often a mistake to listen to others. Your poem - good job.