A Girl

 Fleecy, golden, shiny crown,

glimmering from the sun’s reflection.

Standing silent with the sea,

shivering from the wind’s conviction.

 

Talking, laughing from the heart,

shuddering from the word destruction.

Walking slowly on the beach,

smiling with a warm affection.

 

Wincing, squinting from the glare,

entering into love’s confusion.

Hoping, praying to the Lord,

wandering in beauty’s direction.

 

Kissing, loving in a dream,

shimmering haze of contemplation.

Gazing, staring in her eyes,

I’m now in love without rejection.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

January 21, 1969
One of my first poems...40+ years ago
It feels like eons

Reviews

[AmandaN]

Love this,beautiful,comforting and clear

[Light and ashes]

This poem is so comforting to the soul of the reader. It is so beautiful.

[Sunni Davis]

This is my new favorite of your poems. I love the images, the descriptions of her. The romantic heart in me is sighing. Is there anything better than a love without rejection?

[emmajoy]

What a wonderfully wanton flow of words, love and desire in gentle but obvious presence. Might have been written forty plus years ago but the words still hold that something precious, something beautiful.

[VelvetRosetta]

Wow...love the ending, to love without rejection,love that!
I love writings that have to do with the beach, ocean, seas, waves...it can go so many ways...it can be romantic like in this piece, or daring and dark...just like love...something so beautiful can be so harsh.
A wonderful write!

[Mark]

Forty years ago, eh? Yup, that would be about the same time I was starting, and unless i miss my guess, we started for a similar reason: to impress girls (or, A Girl!) I only wish that I could say that my early stuff was remotely this good! I loved the way the recurring rhyme turns four stanzas into eight couplets...but I can't help wondering in "convection" might be better than "conviction" in S1, L4--it rhymes better with reflection, AND refers to the movement of air, which wind IS! Just a thought...Later, I will PM you a poem I wrote about the same time, employing a similar device; I haven't posted it here, but you might get a giggle out of it.

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

And what a beautiful poem it is...........I'm now in love without rejection. What more could you ask for?

[?]

What wonderful descriptions, images. Really eons? lol
This was so beautiful and romantic. So soft.
Loved it from start to finish.
Ive never been to a beach, have always wanted to but havent made it there yet.
Beautiful poem Allen

[SoulCrusader (Yas)]

Wow, so nice and what a romantic imagery you create!!!

[WindSong]

I like your style and presentation of beautiful words expressed in your lovely poem.

WindSong