Yesteryear

Nostalgia

I took a breath before you left.

Wished you’d never said goodbye,

but still remain among my friends

through separate, cloudy aftermaths.

 

We spent our time together when

it meant we were in love.

You shared your heart at such a cost,

I should have seen it through.  

 

While tears ran down my face at last,

flowed like sand from an hour-glass.

Time stood still, then disappeared,

unable to retrieve lost love.

 

Nights were young, days were sown

scattered moon-dust in the fields.

Lonely winds swept silky wheat, 

I searched for answers left unknown.

 

Reviews

[Jeff Bresee]

I love the flow of this. And the longing it makes me feel...

[Cherrie Palmer]

...lonely winds swept silky wheat...
So smooth I enjoyed your poem.
I also loved the line
...Nights were young, days were sown...

[Coyote Poetry]

Hello dear Allen.
"Nights were young, days were sown
scattered moon-dust in the fields.
Lonely winds swept silky wheat,
I searched for answers left unknown"
The above lines were my favorite. We are always seeking more answers. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry my friend.
Coyote

[Allen Smuckler]

Thanks for the amazing review. You always make me feel good about my work ... That's very kind of you to do.

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome Allen.

[barleygirl]

Your poem conveys as much with tone as it does by direct communication thru words. My idea is that poetry needs to be expressed as much thru imagery & sensory as possible, which is how this feels to me (((HUGS)))

[Allen Smuckler]

Thanks Barleygirl...for your interest and feedback. I agree with you about imagery and senses. Sometimes it matters not if you understand...but rather that you feel. Thanks for joining me back in time....

[barleygirl]

Good point about feeling vs understanding!

[John the Baptist]

Some answers will remain forever unknown, for who is it that truly knows another's heart? Let the past be the past and let it go, for it is no longer real.

[Allen Smuckler]

Good advice John ... Thanks for taking the time to read and offer feedback.

[light and ashes]

This is really great.
" While tears ran down my face at last,
flowed like sand from an hour-glass.
Time stood still, then disappeared,
unable to retrieve lost love."

This stanza, in my opinion, is utterly brilliant. Amazing!

[Allen Smuckler]

Thanks Light and Ashes for your very kind words.

[light and ashes]

You are welcome!

[Sami Khalil]

Very sad and touching poem. I like the idea of retrieving lost loves or at least learn from the mistakes. It is also hard to be left in the unknown state or chaotic state.
I hope you find more loves on the way. The journey is not over yet.

[Allen Smuckler]

Well ... I think that ship may have sailed. Love is too intense and fleeting, and once you find it ... why look any further. I'm glad this poem touched your heart. Thanks for reading and commenting.

[Sami Khalil]

All true and well said. You are welcome dear poet.

[Sami Khalil]

"While tears ran down my face at last,

flowed like sand from an hour-glass.

Time stood still, then disappeared,

unable to retrieve lost love."