Missing Heart (villanelle)

 

 

Dreams of embraces are miles apart.

We shared our youth on that momentous day,

 I promise my love, I’ll return for your heart.

 

We traveled, tasted, and tried to be smart.

April has passed and cascaded to May.

Dreams of embraces are miles apart.

 

Trestled and leaf-like, we dared to restart.

All the good deeds and desires would stay.

I promise my love, I’ll return for your heart.

 

Touches and kisses that dare to depart                                                                       

will soon be alerted and find their way.

Dreams of embraces are miles apart.

 

Palpable landings and paths will rechart.           

Nothing can act like a miracle play.

I promise my love, I’ll return for your heart.

 

Sculpted, molded, and painted fine art

reminds us of moments beyond display.

Dreams of embraces are miles apart.

I promise my love, I’ll return for your heart.

 

Reviews

[poetgurl]

very emotional and so poetic, I enjoyed this write.

[Poetic Beauty]

Loving someone from a distance is difficult but can be done if two people really want it to work but eventually the distance has to depart

[Allen Smuckler]

Thanks Poetic Beauty,
I appreciate you taking the time to read and comment on Missing Heart... there was a photo but I don't know what happened to it. Thanks for the advice too.

[Poetic Beauty]

Anytime, this piece tells a story clearly and beautifully. Even if touched with a hint of sadness

[Leslie Philibert]

Liked this, and I admire poets who have the discipline to work in formal, traditional poetic forms.
Advise all to look at this

[Allen Smuckler]

Thanks Leslie for reading and commenting. I find it a challenge to take on all forms... I think it makes me a better writer as well as a better reader/critiquer. Though I encourage my fellow poets to critique my writes, I'm not sure if others want me to do the same.

[apennylate]

I will return for my heart, as it dropped out when I departed... Leaf-like, blowing in the wind of flair, this palpable romantic poem... Makes me feel smart, hah... Well penned...

[Allen Smuckler]

Thanks Silente for all the tongue in cheek... and for taking the time to create it...

[apennylate]

Of course, but mostly thank yourself... For such a wonderful write...

[Coyote Poetry]

Gentle, kind and beautiful words for love.
"Trestled and leaf-like, we dared to restart.
All the good deeds and desires would stay.
I promise my love, I’ll return for your heart."
The above lines my favorite. Hopeful and kind promises made. Thank you Allen for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Allen Smuckler]

Thanks Coyote for taking the time to read and respond... your comment are always appreciated and welcomed...

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome my friend.

[Sami Khalil]

"I promise my love, I’ll return for your heart.

Touches and kisses that dare to depart
will soon be alerted and find their way."

Very romantic and lovely. You bring love to the front in the return of dreams...:)...............

[Allen Smuckler]

Thanks Sami...much appreciated.

[Sami Khalil]

Much welcome...:)..................

[Ruth]

Love is always worth returning for, whatever the mileage or obstacles in-between...beautifully nostalgic and emotional Allen :)

[Allen Smuckler]

Thank you Poppy for your feedback and support.
There is a photo that didn't show when you read it, so, it's there now if you want to take a look see...thanks again...Allen

[Ruth]

Most welcome hon, my internet is slow today so shall return to look at the pic :)