light (2)

edited and changed for the inclusion into my new book "Unknown Journey: A Voyage through Time"...original is also posted if you want to compare...

You’ve missed the message I sent today 

and lost the passion within.

You’ve left me in a moment of fear 

and now there’s no return.

I always knew which way I’d turn" 

straight forward toward the light,

but moving forward is the easy part; 

it’s leaving the past that’s hard.

So drown my love in the tears of shame 

for floundering in the abyss.

How can we salvage what we had 

when the ship flees through the mist?

Take time to not forget our life 

from then until forever.

It’s not my choice to end this race. 

it’s simply time to sever.

And never shall I lose from sight 

the message of above.

I’ll always know and feel the heat 

from the power of our love.

I spend what’s left of precious time 

and think with all my might,

what may have been and still can be 

once we ignite the light.

Author's Note

written: October 19, 2011
revised: December 15, 2012
Published April 16, 2013
photo: St. Augustine, FL (January 6, 2011)

Reviews

[Anne Timmins]

very honest and heartfelt write.

[Sometimes Blood]

A beautifully flowing piece, magical imagery.

[AmandaN]

Exquisite! No fault to find here. I thoroughly enjoyed reading , thanks.

[lei]

i enjoyed and loved this and my fave for now...

[Becky C Strukamp]

Totally outstanding Allen. A poem of love, a poem of life and the love one brings to it. A poem of hope so as not to regret. This is a beautifully composed writing Allen, it fills ones heart with hope and love, one that hopefully comes not late. Simply beautiful Allen!!!

[Allen Smuckler]

Thank you Becky.
Your kindness and unyielding support are always appreciated.
allen

[SoulCrusader (Yas)]

A very beautiful and great poem :)
Well done

[Allen Smuckler]

Thanks Yas
for your kind words and feedback..
allen

[R.A. Youngblood]

You didn't use any long poetic word, but you made it so wonderful, even if it looks simple at the first look. I love it, really. I can't critique anything here dude. Thanks for sharing! :D

[Allen Smuckler]

I don't know any long poetic words R.A. but seeing the light is usually a simple thing to do...if we just let it flow....thanks for the feedback
allen

[R.A. Youngblood]

Yeah, I can see that. You're welcome! :D

[Dhaye]

I love the couplets, Allen. Nice poem. :)

[Allen Smuckler]

Glad you enjoyed HMM...appreciate the feedback
Thanks,
allen

[Leslie Philibert]

Fine poem, like the couplet verse form, really enjoyed this !

[Allen Smuckler]

Thanks Leslie...I like writing in couplets..don't do it enough
glad you enjoyed..
allen

[allura]

i love this piece, it always hurts to move on and leave those we loved and still love behind, along with the memories, but sometimes it's whats best for everyone. nicely written!

[Allen Smuckler]

sometimes...but as we find out....not always
thanks allura for your reading and comments...read moresometimes...but as we find out....not always
thanks allura for your reading and comments...
allen