Teenage Angst

Just thought this was a good topic others could relate to.

Teenagers have been overlooked,

they're all put in an outdated book.

Seen as melodramatic and suicidal,

looking for a way to win any title.

Comparing themselves to the next,

thinking they'll never be the best.

Looking for someone to approve of them,

to let them know they matter in this world.

Wanting to be loved and adored,

but by someone more than a friend.

Someone to hold hands with and kiss,

underneath the school stands.

Feeling as if no one understands their pain,

so they bottle up all sign of weakness.

Trying to use adrenaline as a medicine,

but just damaging themselves even more.

They see themselves as a ruined canvas,

but are forgetting they are a piece of art.

Mending themselves by starvation or pain,

so they can feel as if they "fit" in, but fail.

Author's Note

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Reviews

[B-poet]

It's so sad that teens get such a bad reputation these days. Being looked down upon as self-destructive yet they're supposed to become the next torch bearers of the free world. Great work Allaura, A thought provoking read. :)

[AllauraRose]

Thanks! I'm glad you liked it!

[Coyote Poetry]

New world made the children stronger. Adults did a poor job making the world fall to chaos. I liked your poem. Honest, strong and worthwhile words. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[AllauraRose]

Thanks for the feedback! I'm glad you liked it!

[Coyote Poetry]

I enjoyed your work and you are welcome.

[mr.cool.as.ice]

I remember feeling like this mostly in my middle/high school days. I remember people overlooking me or just not caring to concern themselves. It's sad because there still kids today feeling the same way.

[AllauraRose]

Yeah, and thankfully my mum isn't like that but my dad acts like I know nothing because I'm younger than him and I don't have any "real life experiences", when really I have gone through more than most kids my age. Thanks for the feedback!

[송지ፏ..]

Nice, it is tough being young when people don't think you can experience any hardships

[AllauraRose]

Yeah, it is. Thanks for the feedback!

[Crowley]

It is tough to be young and I think that older generations forget how it felt sometimes although experience has given them a plethora of great advice to give. The problem with that is that until you have experienced something for your selves and experienced the joy, the pain, the success and the failure, that advice does not resonate. So here's to feeling your way through the mess with the help of a few well placed friends!!!!

[AllauraRose]

That is what tends to confuse me the most, adults were once teenagers yet they seem to forget how teenagers feel. I am very thankful for my close friends, they help make this time in life bearable. Thanks for the feedback!

[emipoemi]

This is indeed a great topic that hasn't tackled much in poetry, and it definitely is relatable to many – words cannot express how much I do in a number of cases throughout the poem. However, the overall execution of this piece I found a bit underwhelming, especially at the end where I found it completely anticlimactic. There's truth in all you're saying – powerful truth – but there's not that much beauty to carry it over. You start out stupendously with that first stanza, and your choice to dispense with the rhyming became ok in the middle, but there was no passion at the end to give it a good bang of a kicker. Also, Stanza 5 Line 3 can do with some musicality tweaking, and Stanza 6 Line 1 has a couple of spelling errors involving the two "to/o's".....the first has the double "o" and the second only one.

Other than that you have something going here! Well done!

[AllauraRose]

Thanks for the review! I edited it, hope it's better!

[emipoemi]

yup, it's reads/sounds very much better. Well done!
And you're very welcome. My pleasure.