Sleep

Sleep

A Poem by AllauraRose
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I have never actually written something so short, but I guess this works...

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Sleep is calling me 

I hear the ringing in my head

I have tried to answer the phone

But it keeps failing to connect

© 2018 AllauraRose


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Great image for me of a restless insomniac, loved it

Posted 6 Years Ago


AllauraRose

6 Years Ago

Thanks! I'm glad you liked it!
I like to sleep. It's a wonderful getaway from this world.
And yep, this works. This works well. Nice metaphor indeed. Good job!

Posted 6 Years Ago


AllauraRose

6 Years Ago

Same and thanks!
Iiiiiii like it. It’s a great metaphor and I think it only needs a few lines.

The only thing I may suggest it not using “calling” and “call”. It’s a bit repetitive. Then again there aren’t many other options (perhaps buz, phone, dialing) I don’t know, maybe it’s good as is.

Much enjoyed!

Posted 6 Years Ago


AllauraRose

6 Years Ago

Thanks, and I get what you mean! Thanks again for the feedback!
H L Rose

6 Years Ago

Of course!

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Added on April 27, 2018
Last Updated on April 27, 2018
Tags: Sleep, insomnia, metaphor, life, help, anxiety, depression

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AllauraRose
AllauraRose

Raleigh, NC



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A fifteen year old introvert who found a way to express herself. Some of my poems are okay and sometimes they are trash, just bare with me. I'm no Emily Dickinson, but I'm me. more..

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