The Fall

Saw you descending from Alpha Centauri,
Coming in weightless on Geminid halos,
an ice-bow of swan cry, indelicate nova,
a meandering circus of flame .

All numinous vision run glossy with travel,
surrendering spells of chaotic design
to palace the valiant
light years with presence.

Your brigantine embers return.

Reviews

[Andre]

Great story, the universe is so awesome it's magnificent marvelous, words can't explain the the wonderful things we see, I don't want to get spiritual but the bible tell us the grand creator created this universe for us to enjoy, I'm certainty enjoying it.

[Alistair (Ali)]

Good on you Andre- I am not of a religious bent, but also understand that we as a species know so little about the universe- and that to me is, brilliant.
Thank you very much.

[Andre]

So true, our little brains can't even comprehend half of the universe.

[Rosie Brooklin]

Very well written. I love the flow and the beauty of this. Impressive vocabulary, as well! I can't wait to see what else you write.

[Alistair (Ali)]

Thank you kindly Rosie.
I have been away for a while- but I hope that in the next weeks time will allow some more poetical ventures.
Thank you so much.

[S.zaynab.kamoonpury]

Impressive diction, very poetic muse, deep n intense. Kudos.


I'm a newbie here, pls read my poems but pleez review/comment only my 2nd , my newest poem here, titled "scenery medley contrasts " , wud luv to know your thoughts, Always nice to meet poetic interaction. And I like to know if my poem is easily understood as intended.

[Alistair (Ali)]

Thank you my friend, I shall pop over and have a read.
All the best to you.

[Glen's not so clean sla..]

The absolute outstanding thing here for me was the language you used. There are many ways to paint a picture but I like the colours you used

[Alistair (Ali)]

Thank you kindly. That is a wonderful review to wake up to!
I always try to "see" a verse- I don't know if that makes any sense-so for you to comment on colour is spot on!
Thank you.

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

“ Your brigantine embers return.”- breathtaking imagery of Fall emblazons the page..superb words paint vivid brushstrokes of fire and ice..ethereal, organic, astral...Love this!

[Alistair (Ali)]

Thank you Annette-very much appreciated-my fellow LFC supporter ( oh, yes you are now!).
Looking back on this piece, I realise that I wrote almost 2 pages of notes to produce 9 lines- and some of the lines I wrote?- well!- I have absolutely no idea what I was going on about!!
Thank you so much my friend.

[Gee]

Haven't reviewed caught OFF out if the corner of my eye. C'MON U REDS. YNWA.
Although born down south in 1962 have a scouse mother and have supported them since a wee 'un. Worst moment, Charlie George 1971 FA Cup final best Istanbul and watching Stevie G over the years single handedly drag the team through games, Olympiakos, West Ham at Wembley. Gutted the wee fella is moving but getting Marhez wouldn't be a bad thing, and the big fella at the back with Matip ( poor man's Lawrenson and Hansen) with hopefully Gomez being groomed to play in there too. Good times ahead hopefully.
Enough rambling...

[Gee]

Have just read that back, it's worse than my attempts at poetry, and that's saying something !!!

[Alistair (Ali)]

Haha!- get in!
Couldn't believe Virgil scored last night!- ( was surprised he even played- but I suppose you can't have 75 mil warming a seat)-first game the derby an all!- but already he looks an addition to the back line. That said, we still need a commanding keeper with good distribution.
Baffled about Phil going in January- it makes no sense for anyone involved- he's cup tied for the CL..In the summer, yes...but now?- don't understand it.
Mate, I was born down south too- Tunbridge Wells, Kent- and have followed them since knee height to a 'hopper- had curly hair too- had my mum slapped a tache on me I would looked like a tiny Souness.
Ah, mate, you have seen some games. Absolutely gutted that Stevie didn't win the title he deserved- could have played anywhere in the World too.Our future manager, right there.
Marhez could be worth a cheeky punt- or Sanchez- perhaps Ozil ( he who sees everything)- but as long as we keep improving, I will be made up...right, I have to bust into town for shopping- get it done and be back for some more FA Cup.

Massive game next Sunday!
Nice one Mate!
YNWA!!!!!!

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

Hi A. & G.! Thanks for providing the British sports learning experience to me...I’m trying to follow it all:):) Over here I follow Syracuse Orange Men in college football, and oh yes- “Let’s go Mets!” In baseball- a family tradition- ha! :):) Have fun today guys...

[Alistair (Ali)]

Aww Annette- These are grim times!- just lost our star player to Barcelona ( circa 145 mil)- I shall head to hills and cry my lamentations to a fell wind- "Syracuse Orange Men"- sounds amazing!!-

sorry for a going a wee bit off topic too!

[Gee]

Syracuse Orange Men sound like a protestant marching band you'd find traipsing around Ayrshire in July, piping, drumming before falling foul of the drink and fighting amongst themselves

[Alistair (Ali)]

Blimey, Gee!-I think you have just lobbed a gauntlet down towards Annette, there!!

[Gee]

My good lady is from an Ayrshire village that had the Orange March come through on July 14th ( I think ) After the parade it would slowly descend into a drink fest and inevitably a bare fist free for all, a downside to all male gatherings.
I manage 50 carpenters and the Xmas bash usually ends up with the boys posturing and threatening. Very childish.
The wee fellas gone, Klopp will have to spend a few bob now.

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

Ha!- no, they’re the Syracuse University N.Y. football team- orange & blue colors and Orange Man mascot. Yeah, it does sound like your description though. They do get quite rowdy G.!:):)

[Alistair (Ali)]

Blokes X Flags X Beers- anything could happen!- and does!
The wee fella is away- it's true!- and we have a play-maker-shaped hole in our midfield now. Think The Ox and Adam are going to have to step up, as I don't see us getting anyone in this window- I could be wrong, I usually am!

[Great Aunt Astri]

You have used some lovely words in this poem to good effect. We can but wonder at the universe. I love your idea of bringing presence to the chaos. Sometimes I think it is all a bit like a canvas, on which the Creator(s) paint into being. Nice write.

[Alistair (Ali)]

Thank you very much. I imagine the Universe is teeming with life and Panspermia seems a pretty good theory to me!
I also miss the dark skies of my younger days and need to get out to those high and wild places to see the stars again.

[Great Aunt Astri]

Yes the 'lighted up' world is quite a problem.. and it all disappears out into space apparently. Luckily we can still see the stars, here, if you look in the opposite direction of the town. And I am not sleepy until I have said goodnight to Orion.

[Great Aunt Astri]

Ps. I shall have to look up 'Panspermia'.

[Alistair (Ali)]

It's worth a look!- and thank you kindly !

[Sami Khalil]

Endlessly we trave and fervently we search for the unknown. The universe offers many surprises within its vault. Marvelous...

[Alistair (Ali)]

Thank you very much for those kind words.

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

some of the most gorgeous sunsets happen in that season that is related to the humans' sunset----before winter's cold....
j.

[Alistair (Ali)]

Wise words indeed, my friend. I never pass on a sunset- because that particular sunset will never occur again.
Thank you, Sir.

[J. J. Nightingale]

What beautiful descriptions of the heaven's wonders
brought through space and time to our world..

I'll not soon forget this one....

Jazzy

[Alistair (Ali)]

Thank you kindly Jazzy.

I'm often lost in a garden of sky, open mouthed and pointing- they will be coming to take me away soon!

[J. J. Nightingale]

Let's hop it's not for a long while that you will be taken..lol..... You are welcome kind Sir....
Jazzy

[lightsong]

First I will thank You because I've learned some new words from Your poem, You've captured in Your words some of my thoughts I was thinking about from a while, and some of Your sentences spoke about it, taking example from this vast universe, something we see each night, a star, the birth of a star, bring it into our eyes, give a real sense of existence, and that star but like us, it falls, so it will rise again to shine, like the cycle of life, brilliantly done my friend, Thank You*

[Alistair (Ali)]

Thank you my friend- the vastness of space and time, fries my mind.
The unknown is endless and , therefore so is possibility.

Thank you so much!