Float on

Kiwi birds in the skyline forcing the air to be thinner and round the cosmopolitan shade out of the arc.

The opium in your tissue was never dark.

Center my shade into yours again.

Even if the sticking laughter is all we have.

 

Shredder the lake into an ocean,

Now float on and never come back. 

Reviews

[andrew mitchell]

A mesmerising journey you took me on, quite beautiful. thank you.

[Jeannette Lunete]

Thank you :)

[MAC]

shows strength in sad times. truly do like this. it is unique in a very good way.

[Jeannette Lunete]

Thanks a lot.

[Mr.Boffin]

really enjoyed reading this...great job :)

[Jeannette Lunete]

Thank you :)

[Einstein Noodle]

the Kiwi sparks my imagination right away ... dizzying heights thin the air and moving past boundaries the opium is just the ticket ;) a love affair briefly held ... no expectations ... then launch it into the ocean ..no expectations ... thats what i kind of get from this poem ..it is smooth and intelligent ...gets the imagination going .... skirts the dark side but then not at all ... i like it!
E.

[Jeannette Lunete]

Thanks a lot E. :)

[Writer at last! Sky ~]

The poem is rhythmic and beautifully crafted by imagination. Great wrote!

[Jeannette Lunete]

Thank you very much

[Writer at last! Sky ~]

Welcome!!!

[Brian Csati]

Profound, mesmerizing and delicate. Loved it!

[Jeannette Lunete]

Thank you very much

[Zakari Schmidt]

The ending carried the weight of the ocean you mentioned, I thought that was awesome. Very cool, I'm glad I read

[Jeannette Lunete]

Thanks Zakari :)

[Relic]

I'm not too sure of the meaning you meant to convey but I like the way it sounds and feels. Nice writing Jeannette.

[Jeannette Lunete]

Thanks Relic :)

[Latifa]

Center my shade into yours again.
Even if the sticking laughter is all we have.
love these two lines and the whole poem, beautiful!

[Jeannette Lunete]

Thanks a lot dearest Latifa! :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

beautifully abstract...there is a feeling that gains momentum in this poem...that cool shade that gets warmer when two share it...and laughter helps us through anything...and can help us love again.

striking piece, Jeannette.

j.