Ravenhill

Inspired by a scene from The Hobbit: The Battle of the Five Armies

Upon the hill, across the ice,

Where bitter virtue battles vice,

Three hearts together dance along

To sorrow’s sweetly aching song.

 

A love new-sown in youthful hearts

Yet ancient as the brilliant stars

Now in the starlight must remain;

No joy on Earth left, only pain.

 

No vows of holy union said,

Yet holy and forever wed.

For death cannot real love abate,

Though lonely sorrow be the fate.

 

The tears that blur her perfect eyes

Are echoes of his silent cries.

He breaks his own heart, so to leave

The one he treasures free to grieve.

 

Now he turns to paths unknown

To leave behind his kin and home

And healing words that sorrow tell

Are fitting for this last farewell.

A father, who had never dared

To voice the grief his child shared

Now speaks new hope into his son -

And all the father loves is gone.

 

The hidden pain of love long lost

Has turned his heart to silver frost.

Yet sorrow, hot and red, now flows

Which all too well the ice-heart knows.

 

Their hearts can never be made full -

Two broken halves make not a whole -

Yet souls intangibly embrace

In tears that shine upon each face.

 

Countless years will pass them by

‘Til reunited in the sky

Where Heaven’s joy will bring them home;

But ‘til then, they must walk alone.

 

Upon the hill, across the ice

Of victory and sacrifice

The lovely learn for true love’s sake

How many ways the heart can break.

Reviews

[paperfox]

'elves do not walk in the dark earth ... I actually used that line when as a kid at school when asked if I wanted to work down a pit. They looked at me blankly as I cleared it all up by saying 'No WAY' ... to which came the reply 'it's good money ...
And this is why the world is split between those that have read it and those that havn't.
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But the plot thickens!
it goes further ...
It's ALWAYS like that in real life ... some people just don't appreciate poetry ... and it's their loss.
You are a gifted young lady ... poetry is in your DNA ... as Spock would say 'Live long and prosper!
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The Review
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I can't imagine what kind of poetry you'll be writing at my age ( prehistoric and proud of it! ) born in 62! ... Cos this is a sparklin' piece of poetic brilliance on the sublime!!!

[AliciaB]

Thank you so much! Yes, my life is basically making subtle references to Lord of the Rings/Hobbit/etc. and freaking out with happiness whenever somebody actually understands them. :)

[Érenn]

I cannot believe this has not been reviewed till now. *shocked* This is such a lovely piece and your rhyme scheme does edge more towards a song or a melody more than anything else. I like to read as well and LOTR is on my to read soon list. But it doesn't matter when i am reading this poem. The imagery is vivid and i could almost feel getting sucked into it. So for me it's a great poem ^^

[AliciaB]

Thank you so much! I really appreciate your review. Enjoy LOTR! It's fantastic! :)