Depression.

inspired by my first idea "you are the weakness in my wings when i take flight, you are the voices saying goodnight, you are everything that is clouding my mind" talking about depression

you are the silent voice in the dead of night.

you are the darkness clouding my thoughts & mind

you're the only thing that doesn't feel right.

you fight and struggle, scream and holler.

your emotions stir

your existence becoming a blur

as I looked in the mirror I saw an unfamiliar face

she stared back with beauty and grace.

I fell into her trap, for she was really a snake.

once, twice, the third time was no mistake.

for she now fell silent in an invisible cage

made up of my confidence and accomplishments fueling her rage.

Reviews

[FIN]

That last line "for she now fell silent in an invisible cage
made up of my confidence and accomplishments fueling her rage."

Embodies depression, for me, solidifying each of the above statements.

Great work.

[Alice]

The ending should always tie it all together :) thank you so much !!

[Tori Jones]

This is a very meaningful poem, and I can relate in so many ways...I have suffered depression my whole life, you really hit hard with this poem...

[Alice]

thank you. really means a lot!

[Tori Jones]

No problem...

[Karmee]

I suffer from depression, I can feel this write. Your imagery is wonderfully expressed

[Alice]

thank you. I have never been to a doctor to test if i suffer from depression but i haven't been the happiest child, but I'm really happy now :) I've seen the beauty in the world even with all the corruption

[Karmee]

so have I but it still lingers in the corner of the mind.

[Alice]

and sometimes it takes over.

[Karmee]

yes it does, you just never know

[Joshua McNay]

This is a nice piece. I love the imagery of the girl in the mirror. Thank you for sharing.

[Alice]

Thank you! That was the funnest part to write

[Dysphoria]

Depression is an aweful thing. I really liked your line that says "you are the darkness clouding my thoughts & mind". That line defines depression in one sentence.

[Alice]

that sentence was actually what inspired me to name it 'depression'

[Dysphoria]

Well, then it's a good name.