a shoulder to cry on

to my friends

Your one of a kind, 

always there,

smart when I need answers,

silly when I feel crazy.

You make me laugh when I am sad,

tell me it's okay when I am mad.

I've gone through so much in my life and sometime I wish I could just rewind it all and fix it. Make the bad things go away, but when I think about it, I don't really know if I would change a thing. Because through those events, it brought two friends closer, and two friends to meet. And thinking about it, I am so happy that these people are in my life, even though the bad things hurt, I have my friends, and I would never want to change that for anything.

I love you all so much.

Te amo! 

Reviews

[Hello, Goodbye]

It seems like pure candor and how can that not be appreciated.. la verdad es viva..

[DELETED]

This is super cute :]

[A Lone Creative Nomad]

Yes to editing, but also yes to it being a really good job. The structure was off, even for a free verse. Keep the theme alive though!

[Tony]

You present an honest appreciation towards friends. Hear-hear!

[.]

ahh...I Love This Mood>>>:-)

what a wonderful tone here..
a great poem!!!

[Lotus]

your sentence structure is broken. The rhymes (or rhyme i think theres only one) you used are very basic, and half way through the poem it seems like it stops being a poem and just starts being a paragraph you should definitely try to break apart some of those larger lines to have this piece read more like an actual poem then just something you jotted down.

The concept of the poem is pretty basic also "a shoulder to cry on" Thats probably the 30th time i've seen that title on here in the past month or at least something similar to it.

My main problem with this poem besides it's lack of creativity and originality is this "stanza" if it could be called that.

"I've gone through so much in my life and sometime I wish I could just rewind it all and fix it. Make the bad things go away, but when I think about it, I don't really know if I would change a thing. Because through those events, it brought two friends closer, and two friends to meet. And thinking about it, I am so happy that these people are in my life, even though the bad things hurt, I have my friends, and I would never want to change that for anything."

^^
This whole thing just reads as if it's a short journal entry in a 12 year old girls diary.

[Steve]

very sweet! and i love the ending...

[Miss Coral]

It flowed at the beginning, and then all of a sudden stopped, and became topical prose instead. I would change the structure, create an appropriate rhythm, and then I think this piece would be great.

[Martina]

Te Amo! That's latin :) love that. Anyway, I think this has GREAT potential, however - poems need to flow. Think more in sentence fragments, not full sentences. Poems need to flow, not be read as a story. If you get what I'm saying. I think if you edited this in that way, it would be absolutely touching and great! thumbs up