forget me, i beg

why are we jostling

where are we going

why are we running

why are we hiding

hide and seeking

cry and weeping

my  darling

my sweet

heart

what are you saying

what are you seeing

why aren't you being

everything i expect

there's nothing left

stop this nonsense

it's so pointless

these games

that we

play

tell me  all your  answers

to all my endless questions

tell me  all your   truths

to all these skilled lies

tell  me  your love

to my green eyes

please  don't

say goodbye

please

don't

for

get

me

forget me

i beg

Reviews

[ron]

The depth of this poem is astounding. I loved from start to finish...and what a finish. Completely amazing.

[AleyshaRosa]

Thanks so much, Ron

[ron]

You are most welcome.

[Broken.Words]

nice write and the great design through writing(hope that's the right word)

[B-poet]

No one wants to lose a cherished significant other. But love is blind nowadays. If their lying to much about themselves you need to let them go regardless of how strong your feelings are about them. You've displayed this conviction very well within your poem. Nice job. :)

[AleyshaRosa]

Mmm... Yes...

Thanks for the review, BP

[Paul Grimsley]

that was pretty simple and direct and i liked the way the rhythm drew me on through the poem. very cool

[AleyshaRosa]

Thanks, Paul
Appreciate the review =]

[Damien Davison]

Creative structure, enjoyed the read. Forgetting could be easier than continuing... Thanks for sharing!

[AleyshaRosa]

Thanks so much, Damien =]
Indeed, it is true

[Faffy]

UMMMM HOLY F**KIN S**T! (excuse mu language) that was like the most emotional and brilliant poem, and don't even get me started on the structure! how do you come up with them it must take so much planing.........but anywho i loved reading it especially the last stanza.

i hate to say but goodbye john keets, byron, enda st. vincent and every one else! there is a new queen in town =P

-thanks for sharing =))

-Roshan

[AleyshaRosa]

Good LORD!
KEATS?! FXCK NO
ohmygosh... What a ... fantastic? no, something more. Something review!
Thanks for sharing, ha! Thanks for reviewing! You never fail to surprise me, Roshan, but this, this was beyond surprise.

Thank you so so (etc...) much
=D

[X]

I like the structure of this a lot. It portrays emotions and your thoughts wonderfully and evoked a lot of my emotions. Well done.

[AleyshaRosa]

Thanks, X
I'm glad you felt it as I did

[X]

I did indeed. Hardest part of reading someone's work is feeling the same emotions. Well done though.

[Jordan's Back]

This is a turmoil Driven poem filled with confusion, and deep sadness. Well conveyed.

[AleyshaRosa]

Yes, confusion...
Appreciate your understanding at the review
Thank you, HH