Belt

Crack malicious knuckles

against your fathers belt buckle

fight the whip of leather

his snarling treasure

Don't tell me you don't deserve it

don't tell me this was different

watch him bleed on the floor

the crack from a buckle blood does pour

Reviews

[Laura Harrison]

This is a very raw and dark poem. And i wasn't expecting the twist at the end! Good write :)

[AleyshaRosa]

Thanks =]

And indeed it is...

[X]

Whoa, pretty dark, man! Haha. Cool though. I like twists in writing, and you seem to be able to do that quite well. This is good, violent, and a bit unexpected. Nice job :)

[AleyshaRosa]

Dark indeed. It was actually for a contest =P
Thanks, X
(as always)

[X]

Nice, I hope you fared well?

[AleyshaRosa]

Naww. No new badges, so I guess I didn't make the cut =/

[X]

What do badges, grades, contests, papers, tests really determine? Nothing, in my opinion :p

[AleyshaRosa]

Recognition. Recognition can get you many places. Though it doesn't say much about your character... however, isn't that what poetry is about?

[X]

It is.

[Faffy]

i guess that break didnt last long =P haha back to your dark ways but this is just well its a bit sinister if i do say so myself but its also a bit up lifting because upon second and third readings it came across as retaliation against abuse and i liked that =)

and then there is all the usual amazing stuff that you hear over and over again =P but as always!

graet read! =)


-Roshan