Underworld

She walks

along the path

unaware of one who stalks

oblivious to his wrath

She sings

a song of freedom

unaware of the man who clings

to her song of doom

She turns

a sudden fear

unaware of the man who yearns

who with hungry eyes lure

She shivers

a quite fallen

unaware of his euphoric quiver

his want an incessant calling

She screams

though unheard

suddenly aware of the truth in her dreams

of the voice that purred

that now coos

that now gropes

that now moans

that disintegrates her hope

and she is dragged

into an underworld

hidden in a forgotten bag

in a room darkly walled

with three simple words

only by she heard

“i love you”

Reviews

[RachelReaper]

aw, maybe the underworld creature was just trying to be friendly! Or maybe not... eheheheh..... yeah, most likely not.

[AleyshaRosa]

Haha, yeah, "friendly" *cough cough*. Isn't that what they all say?
I was just offering you that roofied margarita to be "friendly"!
=P

[Tunder]

Love is always view with a positive connotation. It's interesting to read a change in that where love isn't the happiness everyone always says it is. This poem was amazing; I read it twice. It has a beautiful rhythm about it, and the last line, well who could have seen that coming? Bravo! One of your best yet! 100/100 ~Tunder~

[AleyshaRosa]

Thank you so much, Tunder!
Honestly, I get quite sick of happy, lovey dovey poems.
I didn't even see the last line coming!
=P Thanks again

[NathanBlackie]

everyone's saying it's spooky but.. it's like set in a very real setting... it's about the feeling of depression brought on by an a*****e guy. how is that not obvious?

[AleyshaRosa]

Well, I suppose you could look at it that way...
I was referring to the event in a very literal sense, but hey, depression definitely comes with a******s. =P

[NathanBlackie]

yeah, that's what i was saying... everyone was treating this like an abstract thing or a fantasy or something... idk

[AleyshaRosa]

Ooooh I see. Well, many levels covered I suppose. =]

[Jack Reaper]

dark and eerie, very nicely done

[AleyshaRosa]

Thanks, Jack =]
as
al
ways

[thisis2]

I really liked this one, pretty creepy. The ending is my favourite.

[Dark Butterfly]

creeeeeeepyness! greqat poem, made me shiver

[AleyshaRosa]

As it should!
Thanks =]

[GypsyAlien3303]

Ow, so dark and creepy. I really liked this one:)

[AleyshaRosa]

Thanks, GA =]

[Jordan's Back]

She shivers

a quite fallen

unaware of his euphoric quiver

his want an incessant calling


This poem was eerie and spooky, and shows a darker side of love. I loved it. I think the stanza I put here was the clincher for the depth of the abnormality. :)

[AleyshaRosa]

Thanks, TR =]

Definitely. That's actually my favourite verse as well. I figure, enough of the cheese we call love. There is a side we don't see; grimy fingers that reach for something not theirs.

Again, Thanks =]

[Faffy]

Aaaaaaaaaaand shees back!! This is truly an "Aleysharosa" piece! Loved the dark feel to it the most:)

Well
Done

-roshan

[AleyshaRosa]

Haha thanks, Roshan!
Inspiration has come! Dark inspiration... but inspiration nonetheless! Oh, AleyshaRosa how I've missed you...

Thanks again, and again... and again
=]

[Faffy]

Haha anytime anytime anytime :)

[X]

Dark. Scary. Twisted. Lovely. I like :)

V

[AleyshaRosa]

What can I say, I was in a dark, scary, twisted mood.

Thanks, as always, V

[X]

As we all can be, at our best. You are welcome.

V