Highway

They say

life is like a highway

no matter far long you go

you will always have mileage in tow

it may seem like nothing more than a number

but when you stop and think, stop and wonder

how far have I actually gone, oh let's see, how long?

The rev of your engine pushing you forward is a song

the spin of your tires on endless hot pavement is a lullaby

it is the chug of your engine that drowns out your sobs and cries

you think to yourself, how far have I gone, oh let's see, how long?

Reviews

[Faffy]

i opend this up sing "highway to hell" by AC/DC in my head just thought i should let you know =P haha anyway back to the matter at hand this amazing poem! you never cease to surprise me with your structures and not only that you convey the meanings of a lifetime. the last line really brings this out : "you think to yourself, how far have I gone, oh let's see, how long?"

as always loved it=)

great job!

-Roshan

[AleyshaRosa]

wow thanks, Roshan =]
Much appreciated

[Jack Reaper]

highway, the road of life, how far have you gone to maturity. the things that make us sob and cry, if you keep going, time heals all wounds. it makes us stronger, more mature for living through such things.
the previous ramblings are what i took from it anyway. nicely done.

[AleyshaRosa]

And the previous ramblings are exactly what the underlying message is
Thanks, Jack

[Jack Reaper]

im not entirely sure why that was rambled lol, i guess words are escaping me tonight

[AleyshaRosa]

Meh, it happens.
Ramblings or not, still true.

[X]

Like the structure and the message!

[AleyshaRosa]

Thanks, V =]

[X]

Np :)

[Tunder]

Beautiful, as always! Very creative, the way the lines are set up. I cannot express my love for poems that rhyme so effortlessly, and still hold their meaning true. Lovely work! 100/100 ~Tunder~

[AleyshaRosa]

Of course, course, course
Thanks, Tunder

[AleyshaRosa]

I find using words that are more common, more understandable, it makes the poem mean more to the reader because they don't have to look up every other word.

[Tunder]

well said, and certainly true!

[Aehr]

wow, this one is amazing. I love your thoughts here. I like the way you've put the lines in ascending order. lol...

[AleyshaRosa]

I find concrete poetry to be interesting visually. Not only will the poem set an image in your mind, but also seeing it IN the words...
Sigh.
Thanks =]

[NathanBlackie]

this is about maturity right? not the length of life

[AleyshaRosa]

Yeah, maturity. I never thought about it in the sense of the length of life, but I shall reread!

[NathanBlackie]

oh no cause i mean if it was about the length of life we'd have problems lol.

[AleyshaRosa]

Ooooh haha
lol yeah I reread it and was a little confused as to how...

[NathanBlackie]

It would be about how old you think you are but how long you've lived, feeling like you're drudging through life waiting for the end... that's why we would've had problems lol.

[AleyshaRosa]

oh haha
will this poem is meant to have no negative connotations

[NathanBlackie]

yeah, but there's negative then there's like.... negative.. i like the negative it is... you know?

[AleyshaRosa]

it is the chug of your engine that drowns out your sobs and cries...
I suppose that is negative... yes, I do like the negative side of this poem, but just like life, I like to believe a positive is always existent...

[NathanBlackie]

some of us call lessons mistakes

[NathanBlackie]

i shouldn't have said that, i'm using that in one of the poems i haven't put up yet

[AleyshaRosa]

HAHA
I promise I won't steal, and if it'd make you feel better I can delete it.

[NathanBlackie]

oh no i don't mind, i just don't want to seem like i'm stealing from myself... that'd be so unoriginal.

[AleyshaRosa]

how hipster of you