m**********r

Dont you play with me

m**********r

go ahead

try to f**k me over

lets see you try

you want to save a penny

ill watch you spend a million

dont you tell me i was wrong

m**********r

ill watch you drown

in the luxury of documents

in the luxury of backtracking

then ill be in the luxury

of watching you suffer

and get every penny back

m**********r

oh and YOU

yeah, you

its been a month

i dont have money to give you

i dont have a f*****g uhaul

to pick up my s**t

you want to get rid of me for good

m**********r

watch me leave

watch me walk away

watch me hate

your f*****g guts

no, i dont want to hear it

i did not chose to move out

you gave me f*****g weekend

to find somewhere, anywhere

and you know what

m**********r

im fine.

Author's Note

motherfuckers...

Reviews

[Eric James]

this is awesome! i love that the fact you use foul langual so much ! you really show your anger here and this really get a point across! well done!

[AleyshaRosa]

Thanks, Eric =]
Well, it is a poem CALLED m**********r =P Glad you enjoyed it

[Dark Butterfly]

angry poems rule!!!!!!!!!!!!! screw the people that pissed you off!!!!!!!
100/100
i find cursing amusing
:)

[AleyshaRosa]

Thanks!
Cussing in poems (a word that in itself sounds meaningful and heartfelt) is fanFUCKINGtastic =D
Thanks, DB

[X]

Therapeutic for you, I hope. Like the feel of some of the lines, reminds me of an Eminem song or a slam poem.

[AleyshaRosa]

Definitely slam. Therapeutic for sure, it feels good to just let my emotions spew across the screen. =P
Thanks, V

[X]

Same for me. No problem :)

[B-poet]

Someone's venting alot of repressed anger and angst here. The title speaks for itself. Very candid and blunt regarding a theme titled "Retribution for all of the bullshit you put me through, payback is a b***h m**********r so now the jokes on you!" Nice write. :)

[AleyshaRosa]

Haha I should change the title to that...
Thanks, BP

[dunnia]

love your rage......some people are simply m***********s

[AleyshaRosa]

EXACTLY.
F**k people.
Thanks, Dunnia =]

[dunnia]

haha yea f**k them

[NathanBlackie]

Love this anger, but i love how you can write that then write something very vulnerable. like two parts to a story, the fear and the overcoming.

[AleyshaRosa]

Exactly, my friend.
Exactly.
Of course, thank you

[Faffy]

i love how your poems go from being do calm and serine to "try to f**k me over
lets see you try", I LOVE THEM =P i love it i can feel the rage just irradiating out of your words. the intensity of this i feel comes from the personal pronouns, for example, "watch me hate//your f*****g guts " when i read and when i argue i have to put emphasis in "your" "me" etc. and that really brought it out for me.


GRATE READ (as usual)

-Roshan

[AleyshaRosa]

Haha, well thanks, Roshan (duh)
Even I find the fluctuation of my poems interesting... Ghost Waltz... M**********r...
Poems like this are fantastic to write in about two minutes flat without a line of thought either than hate, anger... I would highly suggest it. Not only that, when you go back and re read what you had blindly typed it's quite fascinating to find out your true thoughts on the situation... *cough*
What would a poem be without personal application?

GEART READ haha
Thanks, as always, Roshan

[Faffy]

haha True that some of mine are like that, its great =P

[Faffy]

HATERS GONNA HATE! (sorry it just reminds me of that so much) =)

[Jack Reaper]

oh how i love rage rants. i believe youve become the queen of them. loved it again

[AleyshaRosa]

Ahahaa! Apparently I'm also a comic!
Of course, Thanks Jack

[Steven]

God this is comic! Did you mean it to be? I thought it was great, so funny...

[AleyshaRosa]

DEFINITELY!!

Thanks =]