Waiting

2008 my friends

The wheat tickles my face

the sky so blue

I can almost taste the hue.

The clouds floating carelessly above

was this the sight of beauty

of love?

But what makes me peer?

What makes me hear

the birds melody

and the butterfly's flutter?

Then it's gone.

In my chest

my heart shudders

The sky goes ebony

the clouds growl

the rain spasms

soaking my hair into sad, wet noodles.

I run

Run so fast

Pain shoots up my leg.

Exhaustion grasps my arms, my legs... my throat.

I collapse helplessly

The rain pastes my dress to my skin

Lightening roars

Thunder screams

But yet,

I'm not scared

No fear beholds me

I close my eyes

Relaxation overcomes me

And then I realize

What I'm waiting for.

Reviews

[Steven Cash]

Wonderful job.

:)

[AleyshaRosa]

Thanks,Steven =]

[Steven Cash]

np

[Ariana]

This a great poem.

There are a lot of descriptive words that make this sound what people call 'adult' or 'professional' but I just think it's written epically! Good job, AleyshaRose! (Did't know what to call ya!)

[AleyshaRosa]

Thank ya (again...) =]

[Ariana]

Your welcome. ^.^

[RachelReaper]

An emotional gush of writing and of description. Man, you are the fifth person today I've reviewed with a KILLER last line.

[AleyshaRosa]

Thanks, Rachel =]
When I wrote it I didn't actually know where I was going with it, but I had already chosen a title (oddly enough) and the perfect line just... spoke for itself.

[RachelReaper]

yeah, well, very nice. :) enjoyable to read.

[Dayran]

Th pleasure of two personas coming together in an expression of ecstacy with each other has been well documented by poets but none so vivid as a poet in love with the beauty of the world as herself. Well done darling!

[AleyshaRosa]

Thanks =]]
appreciate the review

[Ella]

Woah.... (changing it up from Wow xD) this is really good, I love it, but I don't know why. There isn't one thing I love about this, I just love the whole thing I guess :)

[AleyshaRosa]

Well some poems don't need a particular stanza to be gripping or "good"
Thanks =]

[Ella]

Exactly
Welcome :)

[Pax]

you made me imagine when me and my friends go bathe in the rain....in the rainy season... great desciption...
now about the poem, like i said in my quote
Waiting is much harder if you think of the time you wasted.
~ because i always believed that there is a time and place for everything... but then again it depends on the situation...i guess you can put it this way: your waiting for the perfect moment to attack... ;)

Great poem

[AleyshaRosa]

Exactly, thanks =]

[Jack Reaper]

whoa, very descriptive. paints a glorious picture of love and loss. leaves the interpretation to a few outcomes. i really enjoyed this. thanks for sharing

[AleyshaRosa]

Thanks for reviewing. =]
At the time, (woah grade 7) I was going to for as brilliant of a picture possible, and evidently, it's working. =]

[Lydia]

Wow! This is literally amazing! I loved it and I could totally picture it in my mind.

[AleyshaRosa]

Thanks Lydia =] I always appreciate your reviews

[NathanBlackie]

An interesting piece about the mind altering substance called love. wow the way I said that made me feel like an actual reviewer.

[AleyshaRosa]

Oh indeed it did!
Koodoos you sound like caradoc

[NathanBlackie]

haha yeah