Flame

When I wake, I scream. A fire flickers ahead, it's tendrils licking it's blackened front door: a fireplace. Although the bed beneath me is soft and tender, my limb still scream; they scream to move, touch, feel, fight... There are no restrains, but I am chained to this bed, this room.

Where is Mother? As much as she confined me, she was dear to me, she held me when his fingers drove needles into my flesh. When he brought my arm into his lap and caressed my forearm"his fingertips digging graves.

“Please no...” The words leave my loose lips before I could catch them. There's a painstakingly slow shuffle of material to my left. My body stiffens and freezes in spot.

Another shriek quivers in my throat, whimpering and begging to be let free.

Please... Please, can I?

Not, yet... We mustn't let him know that we're awake.

I understand...

My shriek nods and recedes into the darkness of my lungs. Another shift; a footstep.

Please... Shriek whispers urgently.

The bed dips and abruptly his weight is upon me.

“No!” I let her free, let her shrill cry fill the closing space within this room. His hand slams down on my lips and I look desperately about, but all I can see is the flicking tongue of the hell fire dancing beyond my feet.

“Sshh...” Like the flame, his whisper is licking the inside of my ear, burning it's way into my brain. “You don't need to scream, my love. It's all over now. It's all over...” His tongue slides along my cheek. I shiver and squirm, buck and kick.

It's all over now...

I relax... Just relax. I feel the surprise in his body when I come to a sudden stop. His grip loosens on my lips and he brings himself to his knees.

“Do you understand now, love?”

I do.

“It's so easy...” His eyes shine between my eyelashes. With a careful hand, he touches my neck, massages it, leans down and runs his teeth along my vein. I hear his growl before he drags his teeth down my chest and catches at my bra.

Just relax...

But he goes no further. Suddenly he is back on his knees, his hand suffocating me and a pill pressed to my pleading lips.

Reviews

[De-personalize Yourself]

I love the personification you gave to a terrified scream, that was very original and unexpected.

[MOON]

Scary stuff , well written.

[AleyshaRosa]

Of course
Thanks.
Meant to instill fear, glad it worked

[Pax]

now that's a twisting story...lol ;)
i like it...

[AleyshaRosa]

Like an overused dish cloth.
Thanks =]

[GypsyAlien3303]

"There are no restrains," *restraints.
I love how you describe how her nerve ending are almost supercharged. Every time he touches her it's physically painful.
Giving her shriek a life of her own was great. :)

[AleyshaRosa]

Yeah I know about that typo but I'm too lazy to go back and change it =P
I felt it was important to have more characters in the story and it only felt right to make them her emotions.
Thanks =]

[RachelReaper]

metaphorically, morbidly, lovely! Love this!

[AleyshaRosa]

Thank ya, Rachel. Next chapter popped out this morn =]

[Gina]

Like it? NO! LOVE IT! Really confusing? NO! INTRIGUING!

[AleyshaRosa]

Thanks =]
Glad it makes a little more sense now

[Gina]

Oh, it's still a little confusing. My big question is: was she kidnapped and being raped? Was she there by her free will? Is she a mental patient? Is she dreaming?
I reread it and I'm not 100% sure but I think she's high. Is she?
I ask way too many questions. Right?

[Ariana]

This is quite interesting.

There are a few mechanic errors in the first few paragraphs, but it's okay; it doesn't ruin the over all perspective of the story!

I love how you refer to the 'shriek' as almost a person, like it's thinking that if they scream, he'll know they are awake. It's unique and adds something to the story.

I normally don't go for stories like this, but at the second paragraph, it peaked my interest.

Amazing job!

[AleyshaRosa]

Thanks, appreciate the review =]
Yeah, I know about the errors, unfortunately, I saw them after I posted =/

[Ariana]

Oh. I make mistakes like that to. It stinks when you don't realize it a few seconds before, right?read moreOh. I make mistakes like that to. It stinks when you don't realize it a few seconds before, right?

[AleyshaRosa]

Definitely. Unfortunately, I'm just too lazy to go back and edit it =P Better yet, I know my cafe buddies understand that it's just a typo

[Ariana]

Yeah, I feel that way to. On wattpad.com I make mistakes a LOT, and then people point it out, so the post I use most often is 'I am to lay to change it.'

[AleyshaRosa]

Perfect explanation. And if they can't understand that then they're missing out =P

[Ariana]

Yeah. If they really liked the work you did, they wouldn't care about you going back and correcting it so it's to their liking.

[NathanBlackie]

I'm liking this book, I'm never good with subjectivity so i'm not fully understanding it, but i'm really enjoying it.

[AleyshaRosa]

Well, it's one of those pieces that I hope intrigue the reader enough to keep them reading, despite confusion. Understanding will come soon =]

[NathanBlackie]

It's working.

[AleyshaRosa]

Good =]
Btw thanks for following the story. Really appreciate it.