Two Is A Pair

In reply to a challenge

Perfume of young,

splendid

their indefinite presence

luring, cooing us into

oblivion

their souls couldn't be purer

than translucence of glass

reflecting light from sky

into your precious serene eyes

two is pair

i plea three

for me

be merciful

Author's Note

HELENA'S BLUE ROSE CAFÉ

1. Write a poem using all ten words
2. Use exactly FORTY words
3. The poem must use the words in order
(i.e. perfume, first, merciful last)


PERFUME
SPLENDID
PRESENCE
OBLIVION
PURER
GLASS
SKY
SERENE
TWO
MERCIFUL

Reviews

[James William Dyer]

I like it, hard to do without rebelling from the imposed constraints. You flowed it, sounded good.

[AleyshaRosa]

Indeed it is, but well worth.
Thanks =]

[MOON]

This is beautiful difficult to do work in the confines of words and the numbers.

[AleyshaRosa]

Thank you so much =] It is difficult to have to find the right words to delete after the poem is done, but well worth the accomplishment of the challenge. As i mention to Pax, I've got a contest out that's very similar to this if you'd like to check it out. Nonsense to the Senseless.
=]

[Pax]

Great, a challenge...you've written it well...it fits all..

[AleyshaRosa]

Thanks =) Took forever to bow down to 40 words though =P
if you're inspired you can have a gander at my contest called Nonsense to the Senseless. Same deal =]

[Pax]

:) then I'll join you...I'm in the limbo of these nonsense and senselessness pages of thoughts....your welcome..