You Lie

Don't you dare lie to me

Don't you dare tip your hat

And pretend your not just a stupid rat

You swing your cane

You tap your heels

But you don't know how it feels

Don't you grin at me

I'll return with a snarl

I'll rip that f*****g tail

From your greasy little body

I'll rip your ears from your head

And put Mr. Mouse to bed

Don't you dare lie to me

Don't you dare tip your hat

And

Pretend

You're not a just a stupid

rat.

Author's Note

what I took from Banksy's street art.

Reviews

[ayele marie dalmeida]

i sense the anger and i just keep reading your poems because you are really talented and you continue to amaze me. very great poem.

[chandlerl]

...sensing a little anger? or did i read it wrong? XD

[AleyshaRosa]

Hahahaa no I think you're right on point =P

[Neon]

Hahah , oh dear, 'Rose', your really a 'Red-Rose'. It's a very funniest write i've ever read. You really made mah day. The theme's very cool .. keep writing, your cool you lovely angel.

[tressa]

nice and easy melody, but the subject, dark and mean. i like the juxtaposition

[AleyshaRosa]

Thanks, Tressa =]

[Candy M]

This is very creative, I love the idea! As always, I would caution the use of swear words in any piece -- are you sure they're necessary? The imagery is great, though the rhythm may be a little off.

[AleyshaRosa]

Appreciate the feedback, though I beg to differ. I believe sometimes swearing is necessary to portray a certain type of intensity; I feel this poem needed that kind of slam.

[Dayran]

Not the mouse that Disney had in mind ... but the rat of evil ... that stirs the passions to riot. Nice.

[AleyshaRosa]

Mmmm thanks, Dayran

[Dark Butterfly]

oooooooooo anger:) kill the rat!!!!!

[AleyshaRosa]

RAWR vs s q u e a k.
Thank ya, DB =]

[Jordan's Back]

This is f*****g awesome :) Bravo!

[AleyshaRosa]

Thanks!
Appreciate your appreciation =D

[Jordan's Back]

And my appreciation Rests on the fact that you appreciate your friends enough to write this poem for us to appreciate xD

[AleyshaRosa]

And I appreciate my friends appreciation so much I continue to comment on this review stating my utmost appreciation for your appreciation.
DONE

[Faffy]

your words have me so tight by the neck im going to pass ouhbetfQ. SORRY about that had a slight black out but anyway i have picked up on the fact you like to take things you dont like and then tear them a part and literally scare the living s**t out of anyone *laughs* BUT thats what love about your writing the fact that you can make it seem you are red with anger but then calm and collected...ahhh fudge off topic again, OK back on topic...................................i t was apparent to me that you saw this and started writing, i take it, another 5 min poem?

"Don't you dare lie to me
Don't you dare tip your hat
And pretend your not just a stupid rat
You swing your cane"

i can just see your eyes moving though that picture, but thats not it you are using the rat as a metaphor (im so flippin smart=P) which i liked beace it not only made me think about your work and its underlying text but also baksys work and things i may have missed when i was going over his work.
i was a wonderful little thing to read that left me thinking two things

1.poor poor rat.. =(
2. dont lie to you...ever =P


haha thank you for sharing i enjoyed this alot =)

-Roshan

[Faffy]

sorry about the rant in the beginning i just woke up =P

[AleyshaRosa]

Haha, no worries. Rants are fxcking awesome. =] Thanks for the rat! I mean, rant!
Yes, you are right. Another 5 minute poem. =P
Thanks for the essay of a review... AGAIN

=]]

[Faffy]

you are most welcomE =) AGAIN =PPP

[X]

I like it. I like it a lot! Stupid liars.

V

[AleyshaRosa]

Indeed they are.
Gah.

Thanks, v =]

[X]

Quite welcome. :)

V