Swim

A school of little green fish swarm my eyes, than swim away just as quickly.

“Well hello there…” The room spins and the fish return. “Don’t leave yet…” These words echoing is this dark room sound ludicrous, but I don’t mind. At least there’s a sound. At least there’s evidence I’m still alive.

The fish giggle and swirl, floating through the endlessness above me like flitting clouds.

“You're gonna get it...” They sing, smiling selfishly to themselves.

One turns to me, his scales matte black and silver eyes that glare down at me.

“You're really gonna get it...” It growls. Then its eyes suddenly explode and splatter the wall with glitter. He smiles and flickers his fins.

Flicker, flicker, flicker...

I shudder as the glitter rains from the ceiling like confetti celebrating my slow demise.

Happy Birthday...

I listen desperately for the name that would follow... Something, anything...

Eyes that burn as toxic as the end of a cigarette encircle me, encase me in pain that abruptly makes itself known within every one of my wounds.

Flicker, flicker, flicker...

Those eyes. Those hands. I shudder and cry out without a sound as demon fingers slide across my abdomen.

Author's Note

Also rewrote present tense

Reviews

[De-personalize Yourself]

Another amazing chapter! Again, a veeeery minor grammatical error and a little typo I want to point out (please excuse my nit-picky-ness, I just want to help out as much as I can!)
-"A school of little green fish swarm my eyes, than swim away just as quickly" should be "/THEN/ swim away just as quickly."
-"These words echoing is this..."; should 'is' be 'in'?

[alan khan]

This is very very interesting, in the best kind I way I really enjoyed this. He images and use of words as well formatting how it was all set up. Awesome work from top to bottom.

[AleyshaRosa]

Thanks, Alan =]

[Chandler bing]

what can i say about that huh?

[AleyshaRosa]

Well now, I'm just not sure...

[Chandler bing]

hahahaha right its great.

[Pax]

Intriguing birthday??...must read more...

[AleyshaRosa]

Something like that. Thanks, Pax

[GypsyAlien3303]

Great visuals!
"its eyes suddenly explode and splatter the wall with glitter. He smiles and flickers his fins." This is so interesting. :)

[AleyshaRosa]

Mmm I love the fish in this one too, they're my favourite
Thanks =]

[Jack Reaper]

"I shudder as the glitter rains from the ceiling like confetti celebrating my slow demise." this may be the most epic simile ive ever seen. again packed with descriptions that paint a good picture. alas i am disappointed it ended, but ill just have to read on.

[AleyshaRosa]

Indeed you shall. Thanks for the review =] (thats one of my favourite similes too) Happy Birthday, Jack Reaper

[Wakeofahero]

This is very good, I greatly enjoyed this. I thought this is extremely entertaining and grasping to the reader. Well Done!

[AleyshaRosa]

Thanks =]
Putting out another chapter today

[TheLastEclipse]

I've realilzed this is very abstract :D I like me the abstract art ;D

[AleyshaRosa]

Indeed it is. Feels so natural to get into that zone and create a (non) existent world. Glad you liked it =]

[Gina]

Wow, pretty good. Very confusing, cant wait to read more

[AleyshaRosa]

Thanks =]
More is coming