Closing In

For years I’ve wondered as I wept,

What’s the use of things I’ve kept?

Dusty, broken, put away,

Is there a reason for the things I’ve saved?

 

Moments pass when I dance alone,

Thinking about the things I know,

Leaping bounds beyond my feet,

Is there a reason my heart still beats?

 

Sailing by the current's way,

Listless memories begin to fray,

But I turn my head in a righteous rage,

And watch the ashes turn to flame.

 

Harvest fruits of this tree,

Can no one tell what's left of me?

Living life in this endless cave,

Clawing away from the inevitable grave.

 

Watching a sunrise turn to dark,

I lament, have I left my mark?

Bits of life run through my hands,

Every moment a grain of sand.

 

Running alone for many miles,

Against this desert rain I smile,

For fresh beginnings keep me alive,

I know what's waiting when I arrive.

 

Oceans wash my restless limbs,

Fading out as the twilight dims,

I listen closely for one command,

In the silence, I reach for hands.

 

Glistening in my closing life,

A shining spark has yet to fight,

But I close my eyes and breath in peace,

Letting go for a sweet release.

Reviews

[TadKent]

Oh My Gosh. Aleyah, I don't even know what to say. No piece has ever left me like this.
"Sailing by the current's way,
Listless memories begin to fray." Fantastic. You use the water/ocean imagery to depict the "lost" feeling. Classic, and effective.
I also love when you say "Bites of life run through my hands."
So much depth and sorrow, mixed with one failing hope. I added this to my library, and I never do that.

[Helpless]

amazing

[Gitana Deneff]

this is the first poem of yours i've read so far and i have to say i LOVE your writing so much :) i really wish i could rhyme well like that.... i need to definitely practice... hahah hmmm

[Trevor]

Beautiful rhyme scheme.

[joshua deathdealer]

"Leaping bounds beyond my feet" this line is very touching for me. This write is amazing Aleyah.

[Jack D.]

This is so good. I love your style of writing, and I REALLY love how you rhyme. There are so many words in this I would never think of writing. This really is a good poem, and you have a lot of talent. Good job :)

[Kenneth The Poet]

This is a sweet sentiment.

[marielondon]

I loved this so much. It's so relatable and I love how in the middle it shows what it is like when things hopeless and pointless and like time is slipping by but at the end it brings a fresh perspective and shows that there is always hope. The rhyme is wonderful.

[AndyJCash]

The rhyming in this poem was fantastic, rhyming I wouldn't have even thought about and it all interlinks perfectly. Great write!

[Michael Lopez]

i really dig this piece... the rhyme is perfect. the hint of rage in the middle i liked.
i don't comment much but this i liked. keep it up.