Unsound Love

She danced her life beside me

Delicate in her ways,

Picking me up so gently

 I lost myself in her grace.

 

Her cloudless eyes spoke to mine

Her beauty growing as I gaze,

I smiled at her with my loving heart,

Lest she fade away.

 

You saw me bruised and broken,

 But I was shamed and enraged,

You lived by me with an open heart,

I sent you to the grave.

 

But sweltering jealousy took me far,

My forgotten spirit cast away,

Burning out like old stars,

I fell upon the ground today.

 

It was not my life to take,

Her soul bleeding in my hands that shun,

Her pale and lifeless body fading,

What have I done?

 

I wavered regretfully through her hair,

Had she thought me a useless pawn?

Faltering my footsteps each way I went,

Where have I gone?

 

I play these ivory keys,

As I look for you above,

A song in my heart forever,

You are my chastened love.

Author's Note

This is from a man's point of view...

Reviews

[Lily Mae]

I love doing poetry with the others views and thoughts.. You penned this beautifully..x

[☯]

A breathtaking poem. It's beautiful and very intense. It's also sad and the metaphors are also creative and lovely. I especially liked the lines:
"I play these ivory keys,
As I look for you above,
A song in my heart forever,
You are my chastened love."
Amazing job :)

[ब्र&#..]

this was really amazing!! once again
alltid
-Meja

[Celeste21]

What a beautiful image you gave with your words. I liked how you said ivory keys instead of just saying the piano. You wrote from a man's perspective well.