Watch the World Go By

 

A glowing warmth, all around her,

suddenly stopped to grieve

for the empty, wasted tragedies,

of the life she lay beneath,

recovering in a distant past,

so far away and broken,

never forgetting the words once spoken,

“This was meant to last.”

She couldn't cease from giving in,

living deep inside,

forsaking her own forgotten mind,

a lost image she lay beside.

Dangled in an uknown darkness,

bleeding out, left to dead,

among the frosted limbs of heathens,

no place was she led.

Like an untouched, innocent, perfect rose,

left to weep and shrivel on the ground,

shattered in two pieces,

only one piece has she found,

to replace the desolate depths of hunger

that crave some humanity,

out there, somewhere,

to regain her lost purity.

Cast down into unfamiliar fathoms,

an unsuspecting guest,

thrown into wretched waters,

murky was the test,

that began as a simple battle,

between heart, mind, and soul,

lost like smoke in wind,

her spirit now black as coal.

Absent of the joy

 that used to have a place,

she shut her heart in a drawer,

in the mirror, a forgotten face,

dancing like a marionette,

regretting every lie,

she will play the game like most do,

and watch the world go by.

Reviews

[Bare trees]

There's a lot of truth in this one if I'm correct in my interpretation. Relationships are always rosy in the beginning but don't always last. "this was meant to last" is a great word choice for the example of that irony. The last stanza really sums it all up so well. Keep writing.

[Tkess]

'tis better to be left, than never to have lov'd. Wonderfully penned. It really has a nice flow to it.

[Robert Robbie Lord Dudl..]

exceptional write, disappears and slips into a kind of darkness awhile and suddenly
reappears stronger and wiser then before as a person still with human-heart kind
and tender there were many lines i enjoyed was so everpure feelings
and thoughts so deep,
very good composition.

[joshua deathdealer]

Wow, I love your style and choice of words. Excellent flow..xx

[Kenneth The Poet]

Hefty piece of writing, Aleyah, and I mean that in a good way. The theme is soul-stirring to say the least. I feel the pain in this write. Nice work.

[Lily Mae]

And watch the world go by... so emotional and powerful... excellent write...xx

[Miss Marie Riorden.]

The flow of this is absolutely flawless. I can read right through it as if it's an old song I know and have heard since I was a kid. The topic however, is something I know too. It's a very deep poem written with plenty of emotion that pulls at my soul.

"Absent of the joy

that used to have a place,

she shut her heart in a drawer,

in the mirror, a forgotten face,

dancing like a marionette,

regretting every lie,

she will play the game like most do,

and watch the world go by."
This reminds me of myself, and how I am. I can relate to it, and the whole poem. Well written.

-Marie-

Thank you for your review, i've read watching the world go by, it appealed to me the most. Don't know what it's about, but at the same time can identify with the emotion coming from it. I've heard nice things about Australia.

[Akoka Folami]

WAAAAAAHHHHH... sorry, how illiterate of me
Ahem: YOU ARE AN AWESOME WRITER!! YOU MAKE ME CRY!!!!! :'C

[One Metallic Teardrop]

Wow! I love this. My favourite lines are the last two ``She will play the game like most do, and watch the world go by.`` - they sum up your poem in a very strong and effective way. Your writting style is very unique and captivating.