The Dream; 5AM Thoughts

The flashing lights of the fame that seem too bright...

The loud screams of my name as I excel heights...

To a dimension of visions without a clear sight-

Blinking to regain the focus-

I'm hopeless but still I MUST fight!

Just a dream and a cigarette; Enlighten me!

Better yet- Acknowledge my absence as these thoughts devour me!

Thoughts that sting-

Sacrificial suicide; eluding bumble bee's.

Be free.

In doubt? Then just believe!

5AM thoughts of something more than just a dream.

Reviews

It looks like a waking dream, a lucid dream, blue smoke, dancing against the ceiling, shackled, you say your words, you feel your words, your captivated in a dream, and a world, half conscious, half asleep, with real art dances by painful truth ... fantastic piece, could have been a play on stage, a worked out screenplay, I am deeply touched, you write, so beautiful! *big smiles*

- Elisa

[Michelle N. H.]

Night terrors are caused by waking anxieties, I'd like to think, and I surely sensed the narrator's distress through a mind not at ease. "5AM thoughts of something more than just a dream", I like that.. Great piece this is.

[Clara]

I really enjoy the flow and rhythm in your writing.
You also use words cleverly.

"Just a dream and a cigarette; Enlighten me!"

Althought there seemed to be a struggle throughout the poem, I think you broke free and found freedom in the end.

[Karen]

I like the way there seems to be a struggle within the narrator as well as within the poem. The imagery is good, particularly the line of "just a dream and a cigarette." Great poem of the struggle between fame and enlightenment.

[h d e rushin]

I've had those same dreams at 5am and sometimes throughout the night. It has me by both legs,
I cant concure it. That is the parapsychological, investigation fo evidence part that you have
so thoughtfully writter about..

good thought sequence.
dana

[Alexx Wake]

Thanks Dana! It means a lot to me that you enjoyed this, I appreciate your amazing review!