In short supply of any hope, this was a chance to get a lead on the whereabouts of my father, my real father. “An old friend of the family” (so he says); Douglas Thompson, somehow knew about my obsessive interest in finding Dad. After all, my whole Nineteen years of living had been a lie. At least this is a step closer to finding something right?
The nightmares have only been getting more confusing. Last night they continued with me standing on the end of a pier; a bright red ocean surrounded me as an enormous flame engulfed the blank bitter sky above. This sky was then turned pink; Clear, opened & inviting. For some odd reason I began to shed tears.
I was sad. I than focused more onto the red open water; only to find myself, what appeared to be “me” floating. It was clear to me- in that moment, that the red surrounding me in this ocean was blood. I finally got the courage to blink, to focus even more of this terrifying scene I was witnessing.
Never did get to see it, as I was awakened by a call from “an old friend of the family”.
He said he wanted to meet. Even gave me the address and everything.
Something tells me this should be an interesting meeting. I just hope things bring me closer to the truth. But then again... I am in short supply.
Oh my god. Dude, you have so much talent it's spilling over. I am in LOVE with this story, it is so great. Please, please, please make this a novel or something, I'm addicted to this story and it can't end here!! The only problem I found was that you need to capitalize the dad in "my obsessive interest in finding dad", or change it to "finding my dad". But otherwise, there were no problems! Your use of punctuation and bolding/italicising(?) made the story much more interesting and fun to read. It was great! Hope to read more :)
Posted 11 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
11 Years Ago
I'm beyond flattered!
I wrote this in a random time in my life.. didn't really think much of i.. read moreI'm beyond flattered!
I wrote this in a random time in my life.. didn't really think much of it.
I'm currently working a novel atm, butttttt.. If I get enough people to take interest in this idea of a story I'll definitely consider expanding and possibly turn it into a novel. Again, thank you soooo much for this review! It seriously made my month. Thanks Kassie!
Is your novel up here? I would love to read it! And no problem, I better be reading more soon, miste.. read moreIs your novel up here? I would love to read it! And no problem, I better be reading more soon, mister!
11 Years Ago
I promise you will :)
And actually it's not... sorta.
My project I'm working on is calle.. read moreI promise you will :)
And actually it's not... sorta.
My project I'm working on is called: "Lipstick".
A few years ago, I wrote a four part short story version of it. Three of the four parts are on here, but they're not my best work. I was kinda disappointed with the way the short came out so I decided to start fresh and turn it into a novel! :)
11 Years Ago
I guess I'll just have to look at what you got until you decide to put it up! I'm excited :)
Oh my god. Dude, you have so much talent it's spilling over. I am in LOVE with this story, it is so great. Please, please, please make this a novel or something, I'm addicted to this story and it can't end here!! The only problem I found was that you need to capitalize the dad in "my obsessive interest in finding dad", or change it to "finding my dad". But otherwise, there were no problems! Your use of punctuation and bolding/italicising(?) made the story much more interesting and fun to read. It was great! Hope to read more :)
Posted 11 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
11 Years Ago
I'm beyond flattered!
I wrote this in a random time in my life.. didn't really think much of i.. read moreI'm beyond flattered!
I wrote this in a random time in my life.. didn't really think much of it.
I'm currently working a novel atm, butttttt.. If I get enough people to take interest in this idea of a story I'll definitely consider expanding and possibly turn it into a novel. Again, thank you soooo much for this review! It seriously made my month. Thanks Kassie!
Is your novel up here? I would love to read it! And no problem, I better be reading more soon, miste.. read moreIs your novel up here? I would love to read it! And no problem, I better be reading more soon, mister!
11 Years Ago
I promise you will :)
And actually it's not... sorta.
My project I'm working on is calle.. read moreI promise you will :)
And actually it's not... sorta.
My project I'm working on is called: "Lipstick".
A few years ago, I wrote a four part short story version of it. Three of the four parts are on here, but they're not my best work. I was kinda disappointed with the way the short came out so I decided to start fresh and turn it into a novel! :)
11 Years Ago
I guess I'll just have to look at what you got until you decide to put it up! I'm excited :)