Broken Glass,Fighting,Screaming,Flashing and GONE

I screamed in pain,
i cried for him
but i still couldn't hear
the beauty in his voice.
My body hurt
My heart shattered
I felt like
Broken glass
then A sharp
noise coming from
the next room
When i entered
he was there
dead on the table bed
tear's streaming
depression spreading,
my heart screaming
everything Gone
in just a flash
his wrist,dripping red
his's eyes filled with love
his heart
was dead...
never there again
i feel to my knee's
Tea's streaming
depression overwhelming
my heart felt like broken glass,
Shattered,
useless,
gone,
&
Never to be used again

i felt like glass
Fighting,Screaming,Flashing and GONE
Then their was a guy that appeared to be Strong....



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This suck's i dont really write poems alot but this was about timmothy.
me and him were together for 3 years and
we had a car accident he died Because the dr said i died for
a moment but he heard
dr's were talking about
me dying
that night
someone was suposed to die
but honestly i think it was the wrong person
....

Reviews

[MoriartyMesa]

My thinking is if you wrote this on the fly, than all the better cause the emotion is true.

[Damien Thibodeaux]

Alexx, this doesn't suck. Real poetry makes the reader feel what the writer feels. It's best when it screams from the soul. I feel it and I get it. Love and death are powerful subjects when entwined.

"I will stay forever here with you, my love. The softly spoken words you gave me, Even in death, our love goes on" - Evanescence

[ÅŁєxx ƒσx]

Thank you:) and i love evanescence

[Dez H.]

That was deep. kudos ms lady.

[Admiral Kirk]

There's no such thing as a poem that sucks, because each will express it's own individual style and story, and I believe this one does so very well. Your imagery is phenomenal, honestly... The end is heartbreaking. "My heart screaming" is an amazing line. My favorite, I think...

[ÅŁєxx ƒσx]

Awww thanks

[Admiral Kirk]

You're very welcome. :)