The man in the clouds

First attempt at doing poetry, its tougher than I thought but let me know what you think.

Can I live my life right ? See light, instead of darkness.

Can I feel happiness, oh so bright, feel things other than sadness.

To the man in the clouds, I speak, you return no sound.

Is there anything but darkness ? Answer dear man in the clouds.

Author's Note

First try at poetry. Something from the heart ;-)

Reviews

[realmwriter]

Dude, id say for your first time wring a poem, I'd say you did a damn fine job. The flow is perfect and the metaphor is awesome.

[Praiser]

Be humble and let your Spirit hear what God got t say, or who do hear you he heard you befor you wrote down in your thoughts

[MsMermaid]

Your heart speaks well. The "Man in the Clouds" is listening. You can hear Him. Just listen.

[Cassie Fraga]

attempt baby attempt!! that was a great first try!! I love the questions of more... so much goin on emotionally in just four lines... nicely done!!!

[M.E.Lyle]

This is great and a question it seems we all ask. In the darkest times we want answers and reasons as to why things are as they are. Don't expect an immediate reply, and don't expect to recognize the answer when it comes. The man in the clouds works in ways we mortals do not understand completely. This is a wonderful start to your poetry debut. I'm by far not the one to ask about these things, but I liked it and the ever asked question...why, goes on eternally.

[Inyourshadow]

Sounds almost like a prayer when you speak to the clouds as if imploring heaven to hear your plea. This has a deep sense of need and I wonder what would happen had he answered you. Nice, keep em' coming

[asdarkeyesclose]

i liked the play between light and dark, happiness and sadness, questions we would all like annswered. This has a whimsical feel to it that i enjoyed.