I'm Tempted

Sometimes, impressing others costs us the value of our work

To hear my every listener snap;
To feel another roar of applause;
To watch you cheer, and clap;
Not by a fruit, but the above woes.

To impress everyone in the crowd.
To appeal to the entire audience.
To make a name, make you proud.
At the cost of my poetry's essence;

To express myself from my inside,-
But filter words occurring divinely;
To alter the feels I daren't hide;
To be a 'warrior', fighting carefully.

To maintain a great reputation;
To praise opinions over my inner;
To judge me by your every reaction,
To speak my mind so as to be a winner.

To forget why I started to write;
To fear to compose a bad piece.
But no, this time, I'll get it right,-
I'll speak my mind, through a hit or miss.

To reach for my crude thoughts;
To set the bar where I wish to;
To look past my errors and faults.
To pen for me, and not for you!

To make you listen to my soul.
To command the audience of your heart;
To display the beauty in my every flaw;
Cuz speech isn't science, its an art.

Keep Smiling

Reviews

[Krista Weiss]

Wow! Really great poem! I know exactly how you feel! Loved it! :)

[John Alexander McFadyen]

I agree with your sentiment. Good writing is best sprung from the emotion not the conscious effort to pleae others. I did find this a little laboured and still think you might try free verse instead of rhyme and quatrains?

[Alexander143]

What exactly do I need to do in free verse?

[John Alexander McFadyen]

No rhyme and it needs no seperated stanzas. Just follow your feeling as how you set it out.

[Alexander143]

Cool! I'll try it out soonest... Anything else I need to know about free verse?

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Just let if flow easy and with melody.

[Alexander143]

Melody? How?

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Let it sound in your head like a melody, a lilt, so the words move easilly from line to line.

[Alexander143]

Everything is cool, until you mention the term, 'Melody'... What's that about?

[John Alexander McFadyen]

A tune