She Loves Me. She Loves Me Not

Unspoken words

'She loves me. She loves me not';
My mind's loud, hurtful thought.
Her feelings for me; a heated debate;
If not, then, she sure loves me not yet!

Laying, talking to me, on my bed.
Thinking about her, she's in my head.
Here we go again; so, she loves me...;
But if not, she'll love me, eventually.

Comforting myself with blue lies.
I couldn't see with closed my eyes.
I mask my fear behind my doubt.
Concealed the truth, I won't let it out!

Leaf by leaf, I tear out my weak faith.
I will love her till my very death.
The book of my life; loosing pages;
She loves...; my fierce battle engages.

Lost my head. Loosing all hope.
Loosing my life, but I don't stop.
She love me. She loves me not.
But, if yes, then, she loves me a lot!

Drop after drop; under the rain,
If she loves me, I'll take the pain.
She loves me; the first rain drop.
She loves me not; till the rains stop.

One step at a time; strolling, slowly.
Yes. She does. She must love me.
Tired, but I walk on, tirelessly,
She loves me not; its killing me.

Heavy breaths, in awkward silence
She loves me, there is a chance.
She loves me not; I fear to inhale
I feel, our love's start was its fail.

So, I'm letting go of this cursed life,
This lack of love, this agony; strife.
But as I breathe my last, quietly,-
She lays in her bed, 'He loved me...'

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Reviews

[spiritwind]

That last line was a winner!
I liked your take on the "he loves me, he loves me not" torment
You brought out the pain/hope teeter-tottering experience well... too well...
hate remembering the uncertain days of love

[Alexander143]

Thanks a lot... I'm humbled...

[Junert]

He loves me not. It's over.

[Alexander143]

You're funny... Thanks

[Krista Weiss]

Loved this! I know exactly how you feel! :)

[Alexander143]

It feels good to know that someone understands... Thanks a lot

[John Alexander McFadyen]

As I said before trapped in this style you have to conform rather than express. You seek words to impress rather than express. Try free verse Alexander as you have great expression hidden in the quatrain cages.

[Alexander143]

Thanks for the keen observation and wise suggestion... Hope I can count on you to help me try other schemes/forms of writing...

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Of course Alexander you do write beautifully when you use a more free form

[Alexander143]

What are the general rules of writing in free verse?