The Wind

Random thoughts

The Wind


Can you feel that?...
Listen. Take it in. Breathe... The wind, that's what.
Can you hear the fluency of the
freedom in it's speeches?
Can you feel the sensation that lingers on every part of your body that it slowly
touches?
Close your eyes, clear your mind. Can your feel
it's sweet caress?
The life in it's ceremonial dance
on your face.
Yes, the breeze comes to life at
night.
It breathes under the silver moonlight.
Feel it blow and whisper.
Let it sink, inner and deeper.
Let it flow through your soul,
your heart and mind.
Because tonight, I'm like the wind,
Carefree and lawless.
Laden with charm and
tenderness.
Let me surround your existance.
Let me in, let me through, just
this once.


Keep Smiling

Author's Note

Done in under a min, but you can still review it. Lol

Reviews

[Shimmerbliss/CAF]

I really liked the way this made me feel as if I were being led in a meditation...a lesson in being, and feeling. When I came to
"Because tonight, I'm like the wind, "
it was magical! As if opening my eyes from feeling the wind as seeing its personification. This was an experience!

[Alexander143]

I wish I could paint a picture of how thankful I am. It's people like you that give me energy to move on.

[Shimmerbliss/CAF]

You have made my day! It was a pleasure to find your work...truly.
You are welcome and thank you right back. :) - Claire

[Alexander143]

Thank you. _ Sylvester

[Lisa Ring]

Beautiful. It does not matter the amount of time it takes to write, what matters is sharing what is inside you. I think the wind blew through your soul and heart to your hands and became this poem.

[Alexander143]

Thanks alot Lisa. You're so sweet...

[spiritwind]

I am stunned by the beauty, the innovation, of this poem and then you say you wrote it in less than a minute. Uh-oh, I think my writing skills are in serious trouble then. It will definitely take me longer than a minute to review it but I shall give it a try. I love the conversational angle. My favorite line might be--- Let me surround your existence.... But there are so many lines I like... The life in its ceremonial dance on your face...

[Alexander143]

Thanks alot. I'm really humbled...

[James McFadyen]

Personification is indeed a powerful motif and here you are able to use it effectively. with more time and restructuring of stanzas and tempo this could be a great piece.

Not bad for a poem written under a minute!!

[James McFadyen]

in addition the ellipsis at the very beginning is terrifically poignant. very good

[Alexander143]

Thanks alot. You guys are awesome!

[Irene]

you wrote this in under a minute??? omg you're amazing.

[Alexander143]

Everyone has their moments...Thanks alot. I'm blushing.

[Irene]

it's a talent i have, making people blush ;)

[Alexander143]

I think you and I would make a great team. I like to watch someone drive...

[Irene]

haha i think we would ;)

[afra]

beautiful .......well done

[Alexander143]

Thanks alot... :)

[Becky]

Beautiful imagery and beautifully written. Well done! It was eloquent yet concise, elegant and sweet. Unique format, but it flowed brilliantly. Very nicely written.

[Alexander143]

Thanks alot Marble. You haven't been around for some time.

[Yheela]

Your words transform into the wind, wonderfully written.

[Alexander143]

Thanks alot. A few more words, and trust me, I'd be blushing...

[Yheela]

Ah, well too bad I was so stingy with my words then ...

[Alexander143]

Actually, I was thinking of it from my point of view. You see, to say great things, it's best to use simple and few words.

[Pól]

Christ, if only I had your talent. I'm not very good at picturing imagery, even when its done well, but you make it so easy. Well done

[Alexander143]

Thanks alot Paulo. But you can do it too. It's as easy as it is hard. Just try to see, hear, feel, taste and touch your environment. I hope that helps.

[Pól]

Its good advice. U r clearly a natural, where the rest of us have to work at it

[Alexander143]

Paulo, ultimately, with effort, we all get there. Life's a marathon, not a sprint. With time, anyone can be a 'natural.' :)

[Junert]

Wish I could feel like that. Like the wind.

[Alexander143]

I can help you... Lol

[Junert]

I would be glad.

[Anonymous Girl]

Its wonderful. I liked the way you wrote: "Can you feel that" as if you were experiencing it in real life. Its, honestly, wonderful. ^.^

[Alexander143]

Thanks alot. I'm really humbled...

[Anonymous Girl]

My pleasure