The perfect moment.

Bliss before reality

The perfect moment.


So here we are,
In a world of our own creation;
Away from the complexity of pain, so far,
Breathing slowly in an aura of affection.

Your hour-glass shaped silhouette against the colorful sunset;
With a grin, I stare on, wishing to have this moment forevermore.
You are a stroke on the painting of my fate,
There's nothing more I can ask for.

I step forward and wrap my arm around your waist.
You look at me and then back at the horizon.
You rest your head on my chest-
As we telepathically bargain with the arms of time to hold on.

Silence embraces the air,
But in the silence, our hearts communicate our love.
Two square metres of sandland; empty and bare,
Yet has everything I could ever dream of.

I look at your hazel eyes-
Just before you turn to stare at mine.
You truly are the grand prize,
And your hard-to-get attitude was the perfect finish line.

I want us to take a trip, just you and me.
We'll board the first class of cloud nine,
Through the path of ecstasy.
I want to assure you that I'm yours, and you mine.

I want to keep this perfect moment.
I wish I could make time freeze like Joshua.
I want to relive every part of this event,
I never want to glance back at now with nostalgia.

So, I'm slowly letting go, our bliss begins to dim.
Some harsh reality fills our golden plate,
You stare at my watch an scream,
'Oh my God! I'm late!'

I snap out of it. So it was real?
Just before you take me back with your 'good night' kiss.
Okay. I don't care what is and what's not real.
So I kiss you back, and see one more moment of bliss.

I watch you walk away.
Untill your figure disappears in the evening haze.
The moment is gone, but the memory will always stay,
Untill the time that I'll start and end each of my every perfect day with a glance in your eyes.



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Reviews

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Well I was flowing though this again and suddenly QUICK SAND! Stanzas 8 and 9 just don't fit they slow the pace and are clumsy take them out and you still have a very emotive piece.

[Alexander143]

I trusted your judgement. How is it now-

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Well Alexander this now hits the mark. Sometimes you don't have to paint the full picture in poetry for the impacr and point to be made. Just like impressionist painting. Thank you for your trust that is indeed a wonderful compliment. You do write very expressively and your use of imegry and words as concepts and pictures will only get better. well done!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Ignore my fingers as they move too fast for my keyboard!!!

[Alexander143]

I hope there's enough 'thank you's to go round, because I'm about to dispatch some myself. You're a great observer. Thank you for spending your time on my pieces. Oh, and about your fingers...point taken. Lol

[John Alexander McFadyen]

No I like your writing. Keep enjoying it do not write to write, feel to write. Use the feeling and not the theory of language. You already have that in you from the pieces I have read and I WILL read more as an honour not a task.

[Alexander143]

Thanks alot. I'm really inspired.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

But I did not give that to you I am merely helping you to liberate it as it is part of you Alexander.

[Alexander143]

You have a way with words. I like the way you play around with them.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

It is kind of you to say so but it is the truth.