Half Past Midnight.

Uhm, this really isn't much better than anything else I write, but this is how I like to get my feelings out.

I'm as happy as I could ever be as we sway back and fourth, dancing to the rythm of the music as we move our feet,

I rest my head upon your shoulder, relaxed and at ease, I close my eyes, what more could I ask for?

A blush and smile take over my face, with you pulling me closer, the music seems fainter and we slow down our pace,

My joy quickly fades as the music stops and I come to a halt, I open my eyes only to find out you're gone, the ballroom's empty and I'm alone,

I manage to catch a quick glance at the time, my heart begins to bleed and tears dwell as the clock strikes twelve,

This pain in my chest is unbearable and I fall to my knees, my breaths are staggering and I'm unable,

I failed to see the truth and I've lived throught this fairytale, I can't take this anymore, the blood is pouring all over the ballroom floor and I begin to feel weaker and weaker,

I fall to my side feeling empty without you, it's a half past Midnight, my friends are back to mice, my dress back to rags and everythings gone black,

As I lay in the pool of my own blood and the ringing in my ears begin to turn into a blare, I wait for True Love's Kiss to wake me from this nightmare.

Reviews

[Wolfwind Words]

The imagery in this was wonderful! Dark yet, in some fashion sorrowfully romantic. A nice twist, in weaving some well known themes into an original piece of ink.
As to your emotions coming out... any way you can, is what I believe. Ink on! Ink on!

Hugs!
Wolfie

[Drifter]

I felt like this would be perfect with music in the background... something intense and dark. I enjoyed it immensely. Still, there are some lines that could use some rewording, but that might just be me nitpicking.

[Brandon]

i loved this poem it was very dark and very good keep up the great work



100,000,000,000/100

[Joseph - Michael]

It's like reading dark and twisted version of "Cinderella" and "Sleeping Beauty" combined...

Overall, well put together...