What You Deserve

Curing a bit of writer's block. Relieving a little pent-up anger.

You seldom ask me how I feel with meaning.
Questioning my mood, when you know, is demeaning.
Resentment trickles in my veins.
You've ignored all of my struggles and my strains.
I was there for you to keep your spirits high,
But you left me here to wither and die.

When your life falls into shambles,
I'll laugh at your tears and depressed rambles.
I thought this feeling would eventually pass,
But I'm going to laugh when you're dumped on your a*s.
Even if it seems incredibly blunt and cold,
It's what you deserve and need to be told.

When you are crying in nobody's arms,
Remember that I could have eased that harm,
If only you had stayed to soothe mine.
Instead you lived ignorantly and thought I was fine.
I know you've been happy as of late,
You've shown it enough, rubbing it in my face,

But when you're alone, remember me,
The person you were willing to flee,
Maybe then you'll realize how wrong you were,
You'll come crawling back, I know this for sure.
I won't be there because that time around,
You'll be solitary and I'll leave to drown.

Author's Note

It sounds a bit like my only other poem, "Alone" but I can only be in certain mood to write verse.

Reviews

[piggy]

cold and callous.
a wee glimpse of hate. well captured.

[Jessica Lynn]

love it. it speaks to me. it's almost like some of the relationships i've had with my guy friends that i've had crushs on. awsome!

Wow, I would have to say that I'm jealous. I have never been able to write poetry, but this makes me want to. The moral in this is beautiful, and I hope to one day write something half as deep as this was.

[Tony]

This is a whining about insignificant concepts, likely invented and activated by the character. Resulting from selfishness and apathy.
Next we have the good old wishing hate on, and forecasting the presumed disaster of the enemy.
Which is cleverly disguised as "If you had only...." Nice touch.
Then we have more empty words of disgust and loathing.
At this point I feel as though it is being rubbed in MY face, and am delighted
as, in my minds eye, I watch the body fall below the sheen of polluted watershed.
Great Poem!

[Ruth]

Only so much we can give to someone before the sun needs resurrecting within side of our own hearts!
There is a wonderful structure to this, really emotive:)
A good heart taken back!
Wonderful
xx

[Jennifer Neuman]

I love the rhyme scheme in this, and there is just enough passion in the words to contradict the cold and hurt tone. Nice job!

[~*_Michelle_*~]

o.o
No words can describe how much I love this... .-. I love the passion, the rhyme scheme, the..everything...:))
T^T Bravo!

[SimplyDisastrous]

I love this! Excellent write! And, what a coincidence, you added this poem on my birthday! :D

[Amy Bumpas]

Love can certainly leave us in shambles. This poem
in stages said it all, the trials, and tribulations that
sometimes we endure. We may feel alone, but we have
all been down the path. Nice rhyming to your words
as well.

[Nancy Lee Shrader]

I always say show your anger and resentment in poetic verse and not with the people you love. Great Job.