Alone

I suck at poetry so be critical.

Saying what you'd rather shout,
Would have its repercussions without a doubt.
But she didn't expect to feel this hollow.
For weeks she felt bitter, now she feels sorrow.
Even if she's near, she's not one of them.
Should have given up instead of trying to pretend,
That it all was fine and they were all friends.

Now she's alone in a world of words,
Where nothing can hurt her and no one is heard.
She always said that's where she'd rather be,
alone in her room crafting feelings of misery.
She give anything to take it back,
Every insult and each attack.

It started with a boy, then it got worse.
Even saying it now, her voice goes hoarse.
By losing the people who got her the most,
The words of solitude pour from her throat,
Onto the page, the misery she wrote,
Now belonged to her.

She called on the page for comfort.
It took more effort to hit these keys,
than it would have to type apologies.
Yet she made herself write this poem.
Thinking maybe it might show them,
How she feels now and how she felt then.
But it might not matter, we're all alone in the end.


 

Reviews

[Elaenor Aisling]

Love it. I connected with this so much. A great poem.

[Sunflower/Sara Kendrick]

There is a friend that sticketh closer than a brother..So we are never alone..Good emotive work..Better to write it out and release those feelings..Sunflower

[Jessica Lynn]

love it. it expresses how we all feel from time to time and it describes how i'm feeling now. just lovely.

[Mekki Amel]

This is wonderful.

My favorite lines are these, because they express an uncomfortable situation well.

Even if she's near, she's not one of them.
Should have given up instead of trying to pretend,
That it all was fine and they were all friends.

[Amy Bumpas]

This is a great poem, and rhymed so well together too.
So many people could probably relate to this, feeling alone
rather than losing yourself and trying to fit in.

[amanda gott]

Now she's alone in a world of words,
Where nothing can hurt her and no one is heard.
She always said that's where she'd rather be,
alone in her room crafting feelings of misery.

these are my favorite lines, i thought the poem was actually really really good. i would deffinately say that you don't suck

[Ruth]

I would say job well done love!
An indepth poem actually that allows the reader to see the poignancy of how alone we truly are!
Powerfully moving hon!
xx

[SimplyDisastrous]

You're not horrible at poetry. This is beautiful, Alex. I really liked the rhyming scheme. My favorite part was the first stanza because I felt it has the most emotion in it. Excellent poem [:

[Julijana Velichkovska]

true, we are all alone in the end...
Beautiful poem!

[Nancy Lee Shrader]

Well written. Congrats on your great winning poem.