Hell

Living life in a world filled with hate...that's hell

I feel your eyes.... 
I fear your hate.... 
I know your there.... 
Is this my fate? 

Creeping in the shadows.... 
Breathing down my neck.... 
Feeling down and blue..... 
No bigger than a speck. 

As I run away, 
Sweat streams down my face.. 
Trying to get out of here. 
Wanting to leave this place... 

Wishing I had converted over... 
Wishing I had him.... 
Waiting for him to rescue me.... 
To be no longer condemned. 

Reviews

[DiMar4u]

"to be no longer condemned" wow. pain has a way of pushing us away from everyone else. wishing and wanting belittles none of the sting. i particularly love the last line because it is a place than can be left behind. a new perspective can not only ease the pain but somehow give it purpose, as the lesson is learned we all become free....thank you for sharing-

[tk]

very dark indeed. :)
loved the emotions, especially the struggle to escape from that place.
great job!! i enjoyed reading it.. :)
♥♥♥

[Zachary_James]

Loved it very powerful write.

[paradise]

very very interesting poem, It had a very dark sense to it which I enjoyed because it flowed very well.

[Krisen Lison]

This is beautiful Alex, very intense and full of lovely emotion. It will always get better.

[Coyote Poetry]

Such strength and emotion in this poem. The language was dark and the desire to be free of the pain. I like the flow of thoughts and some hope at the ending. A excellent poem.
Coyote