Shipwrecked

A poem regarding the challenges faced within a particular relationship, predominantly the element of unrequited affection. Maritime in nature, felt only necessary given location when transcribed.

Shipwrecked

Dear Love,
Rise from your knees.
We can no longer linger in this emptiness,
for the tide has chosen it's path.
We must move to survive, whether apart or together,
for we will drown anchored to each other.

No matter our longing, we are free this way,
we are safe this way.

That beam in the dark has lengthened our journey,
but now we are warned.
To continue is to falter, to crash,
into those rocks which come as bridges
to what we thought was endless love.
A tempest of sorts, strong in its force.

We must depart,
not together but apart.
But you will not cease,
like that creature, that myth,
you entangle yourself to my body,
my ship.

But with those rocks which stand sentinel,
this way neither of us survive,
taken-are both our lives.

Release me and we shall flourish,
though only with others are we nourished.
Yet a scar shall remain,
not a scar-a memory,
held firmly in my brain, buried within your heart.

Perhaps that is where we went wrong, my dear.
I thought too much, and felt not enough.

The unrequited love of two beings,
destined in the arms of others.

My love, rise from your knees,
or stay eternal in these unforgiving seas.
Disguised, to our surprise, as my affection.

Author's Note

Written in a flourish of thought, therefore grammar or techniques aren't as prominent within focus.

Reviews

[dan]

alex-marie, Let me just say this: Wow! I want to tell you that especially now, since I don't really KNOW your writing yet, but even in general, I don't like to review by quoting lines or stanzas; I prefer to look at each write holistically, in its entirety, and base my feeling on that. I have to say that you seem to have an impeccable command of the words at your reach, and you seem to (at this point) have a unique style that is quite stunning, to say the least. Why am I only making your acquaintance now? Where have you been? I'm going to send you a friend request (or are we already there? I'm sorry but a bit preoccupied as I'm watching my Pittsburgh Penguins (National Hockey League, US) Please send me read requests because I have a lot of friends and have a helluva time keeping up with my reviewing obligations, so RR me? Did I say yet that it's nice to 'meet you?' take care...dan

[alex-marie]

Thankyou very much, as you could probably tell by now, I'm not one for settling for convention in form. Thankyou, I will send requests and also get around to reviewing some of your pieces, It's nice to meet you too. -Alex

[Richard]

jesus :S
it very much connects with me ha
it's really good

[I Am Svetlana]

"Perhaps that is where we went wrong, my dear/ I thought too much, and felt not enough" such power and inner truth to your words. I especially admire how you began this life because in my head, I saw a person standing in front of another, offering a hand in order to help them up from the sand. So they could carry on together. I often wish to be shipwrecked, but it's never healthy to be "gone" for too long. Very inspiring and beautiful!

[alex-marie]

Thank you very much, I appreciate this.

[ANM]

Very nice poem and so true sometimes we crush that which we love...

[Málum]

Very well written, I thoroughly enjoyed this.

[alex-marie]

Thankyou, I'm glad to hear it. x

[Eli Davis]

I stumbled across this and I rather did enjoy it. I loved the use of imagery and heart.

[alex-marie]

thankyou x

[Blogger]

You did well here! I like how this seems to come right from your heart.

[alex-marie]

thankyou, it is one that hit home for me while writing.

[Blogger]

I see that. Keep writing! You have skill i see.

[Roger Turgeon]

If you love something let it go.....I'm reminded how some relationships are better apart than they are together. Good work.

[alex-marie]

Precisely my reasoning, thankyou.