Cherry Blossom

Something about her
the way she sips her beer
as if it’s tea, and she’s in a kimono
peering out into a storm
as the wind rattles the pot
and snakes through the silk
she undulates, sliding her finger
over the rim, then sips

I know the real storm
broods inside her frail frame
but she says little. mostly listens
and it drives me utterly insane
she should scream or bang on walls
she should throw ashtrays into tvs
but instead, she simply nods
her glazed eyes as still as pearls

She’s like a cherry blossom descending
towards the  muddy trail below
she will be trampled by hooves
of  merchants and thieves
and I am the charcoal cloud, aching
as I feel her falling farther from me…

Author's Note

whatever comes to mind, as always.

Reviews

[Brittany Zedalis]

You always know when you've written something that is moving for others when reviews still come in after years of being posted. The title caught my attention because I absolutely love cherry blossoms, and I'm very glad I took the time to read this. Truly beautiful work.

[Alessander]

Thank u Brittany.
And merry xmas

[Brittany Zedalis]

Merry xmas to you too! ^-^

[Unspoken poet]

Wow, this is so deep, love the imagery I got with this write,
emotions in this is powerful. Awesome writing...

[Ardra]

She’s like a cherry blossom descending
towards the muddy trail below

very beautiful line... the feeling of helplessness as you watch her suffer... yet the frustration you feel....but not a sigh or cry from her end...

[Alessander]

Thanks Galadriel.
And unfortunately, what I feared would happened happened.
She died tragically young. Trampled by thieves and merchants.

Thanks for reading. Glad it touched you in some way.

[Ardra]

Oh... :( guess sometimes we cant help ... and just watch as cruel fate does what is planned to do..

[Alessander]

yes, some ppl go down the rabbit hole, but unlike Alice, they never return.

[Ardra]

:) i guess we all loose the pathway from which we came down at some point of time...i easily end up loosing on roads without GPS :P so i guess its easy to get lost...

[Emily L]

I really enjoyed this write. I love to read writings that take one specific simplistic situation and turn it into descriptive images that fill your mind with a perfect image.The amount of description in this poem is quite excellent, I can picture this woman quite clearly. The relationship you have written between yourself and this girl makes me intrigued to read more, I quickly became curious about their past and future together. I felt like a whole story could have unfolded from this ,but the little spinet into their lives was just perfect enough for the reader to get an insight of the two. You can't compare this poem to any other, it's simply original, straight from your mind alone. Again really good read. I'm always excited to see writings like these.

[Alessander]

Thxs, Emily. Very flattered.
Just happy it moved you in some way.
Thank you for stopping by.

[Lovecraft]

Don't Cherry Blossoms symbolize Clouds in Japanese Culture? If so, that last stanza is beautifully appropriate.

A woman too lovely and delicate for this world came to mind as I read this, a woman not long for this world just like cherry blossoms as they bloom for around 2 weeks in Spring before they disappear.

A very good poem with some great visuals and a strong theme. Very good, Fellow Serial Killer! ;)

[Alessander]

Oh, hey, didn't see this review. Sometimes I don't receive indications, for some reason.

read moreOh, hey, didn't see this review. Sometimes I don't receive indications, for some reason.

But thanks! Yes, contrary to popular belief, not all serial killers are stonecold ;)

[Alessander]

wow. Just saw my comment. I think it must've pasted something . Don't know where the 'read more' came from. I think my comment got cut off or something.

Anyhow, yes, Blossoms are symbolic in japanese culture, usually stand for the transcience of beauty and life.

It was customary for samurais to write poems about them before going to war and certain death.

[?]

I think this is really great good job

[~]

Indeed there is magic with these simple yet enchanting flowers. I got attracted by the title and I confess the poem filled me with so much yearning and longing. Your words dancing like the cherry blossoms on the breeze, each carrying a word of love, a sigh, a greeting.. loved it!!

[Alessander]

Thanks, moonskittles. I always get surprised when others like my stuff. Appreciate you taking time to check out my scribblings.

[~]

Do not doubt yourself. This poem, is added to my favorites :D

[StarlaFireDelta]

She undulates ~a quiet perspective
Observation and conclusion as if you already know her fate

[Alessander]

Wow. Just saw this for some reason.
Thanks, 2 yrs later! :O

[Astrid]

Utterly breathtaking. Such grace in these lines of art ~ a pleasure to read c:

[Alessander]

Thanks, Astrids! Must admit, this is one of my personal favs :P

[Astrid]

Mine too :)

[Afraa]

This is a real masterpiece. From the title, to the picture, to the actual words. Indeed it is one damn mesmerizing piece, but I feel like even that is an understatement. You have a way with words, and this subconsciously put a smile on my face. I think it was the gorgeous descriptive language that did it. Those last six lines was the final blow for me.

Is this really what goes through a guy's head when he sees a beautiful woman?

Thank you for sharing!

[Alessander]

Thanks, aafra. Cant speak for other dudes, but that is what I see, and it's not' conventional' beauty that inspires me for the most part. Very happy you came across it. Gracias.