Crucifixdrones - pedolandia Jdate.POF.AshleyMadison.Match. Eharmony.SpeedDate.OKcupid CG. Missed encounters... Serial killers, /Pixalated p*****s, vein-throbbed dick shots, cardboard gloryholes
Instagramed I/Inviolate I/Internet I
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No sweaty arm pits, cottage cheese, gray nose hairs or belly fat Computer [ScreenShot] While behind, posters hang: The Doors, Tupac, NIN, The Smiths, Hendrix, Joy Division, Nirvana
HandshapedHeart.//2D souls/Text-dating 144 word manifestos /#revolutions/Archetype emoticons
Doodled centaurs /Caged in matrices
Transcendental notes/Need a hit/Of internet smack
A line, a pinch, a drag/A like, a comment, a kudos A reply, a thumbs up, a share, a poke/One measly view Baby, come on, give me a fix/Just one Notification: ding-beep-buzzzz I want to dissolve like alka-seltzer in tap water Otherwise I'm a used-up toothpaste tube Sitting in a dank medicine cabinet
If not, I am/A stick-figure created from matches Drowning in a drum of gasoline
Not buried beneath pregnant soil No. dumped into blue recycling bins.
Thanks, EA. I actually had to play with the length a bit. I wanted to give a glimpse into the theme,.. read moreThanks, EA. I actually had to play with the length a bit. I wanted to give a glimpse into the theme, but without being totally comprehensive (given that the internet and tech is practically limitless). Had to straddle a bit, but I'll see if anything unnecessary can be chopped off.
Thxs again.
10 Years Ago
It is your work, of course. I just felt a little lost in the middle....focus shifted. But then aga.. read moreIt is your work, of course. I just felt a little lost in the middle....focus shifted. But then again, that also happens on the internet!
It's the "Metaverse" now. Just so much more wasted technology on the road to cyborg replacement of the species. They talk about, "New World Order" I'll have a cheeseburger and fries. Fun read. Cheers! F.
behind that screen we can be anything we want to be....technical selves versus real selves, the flesh and blood kind.
mine got electrocuted....somewhere within that machine...
I became the stick figure drowning in gasoline, lighting a match my Dell...
and then ran away to untamed land to find a real Dell....
the nature kind.
great write, Alessander, and what will we all do when the sun decides to take it all away and we must face each other flesh to flesh...with nothing more than our whit.
Extremely dynamic metaphors happening in the beginning of the piece,
it sort of acts like some staccato rhythm. It then veers off into a more relaxed
cadence. However, that "I I I" thing in the middle seems to take away from its
natural rhythm..structurally its interesting. The theme of this piece sounds out
from an insightful perspective, just the way it should be.
My friend you have a true poetic voice and I do admire how you cut straight through the bullshit .
Never water down a write much like whiskey cheers amigo.
Stay crazy Gonzo
Posted 10 Years Ago
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10 Years Ago
Yo, Gonzo, you're back! Shot-gun pass through the W.C. Thanks, man. Maybe I'll catch you on here nex.. read moreYo, Gonzo, you're back! Shot-gun pass through the W.C. Thanks, man. Maybe I'll catch you on here next time.
Yeah, as the meme says, "crazy bullshit. No one got time for that!"
I like the whole piece - modernity clash...thrill and buzz...highs and lows...raw and real - as always x
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10 Years Ago
I feel like that's an undercurrent to many of my pieces. Modern landscapes set against classic wisdo.. read moreI feel like that's an undercurrent to many of my pieces. Modern landscapes set against classic wisdom/beauty. Or in this case, modern virtual landscapes...
Thanks for reading, Poppy. Cheers from across the pond.
This is quirky albeit a sign of times, price we pay for progress, modern technology now rules our lives. Imagine what it'll be like 20-50 years from now. I can't pick a favorite line, they're all so unique and intriguing. I must admit I haven't seen a youtube communion yet though....muchly enjoyed!
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10 Years Ago
thanks, Frieda. I know this piece is a bit incoherent, but so is the theme lol Glad u stopped by.
10 Years Ago
I actually didn't think so, I guess that makes me incoherent too, shocker haha...my pleasure. ;-)
This reads as very stream of consciousness, which in this case makes sense, since it sort of mirrors the endless stream of information and images from the internet. bear in mind, though, just like the internet, it can be dizzying and hard to follow in places.
I would omit or modify "whimsical gifs" from line 16, it breaks up the flow, and in my humble opinion the word whimsical has no place in this poem
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10 Years Ago
I think ur right about Whisical GIF. I inserted that later, but re-reading, doesn't really jib. I'm .. read moreI think ur right about Whisical GIF. I inserted that later, but re-reading, doesn't really jib. I'm still tinkering with it a bit, so that might go.
And you're also correct about the stream-of-thought process. Function/form and all that jazz, though I am editing this piece, so I guess it's not truly a raw stream-of-thought piece like my other work "Xlove with a Shotgun". Anyhow, thanks for the input.
Si se puede
I'm doing more multimedia stuff. Engaging. Experimenting. Expanding.
Check out my pieces below; It's 2020 not 1820. Time for change.
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