Beware

The devil in me

Is the devil in you,

What I thought was one

Has turned out to be two

And what I see

Is that you are scared of the truth

 

Beware,

Because what you want

Isn’t always what you get.

You could be dancing with the devil

On quicksilver

 

What you thought was you

Has turned out to be me

What you thought you could do

Failed…

Because you don’t believe

That what I am,

You can never be…

Reviews

[Trigorin]

Nice piece, paints a very distinct image and has a solemn tone, which I like. I especially like the bit about dancing with the devil on quicksilver, very vivid picture right there. One thing I'd say is maybe tighten up your formatting and line breaks a little, not sure I agree with all the divisions you've made.