All My Life

poetry

you are the only one

my everything

all my life ive searched for you

my prayers have been answered

you came from afar and

graced me with your love

i wouldnt be anything without you

 

all my life i searched

for someone like you

you chased the darkness away

brought hope and melted

despair away

in my hour of need you lifted me

up when i was lost

 

i prayed that you would

touch my heart

by the grace of a higher power

you made my life whole

all my life is dedicated to your happiness

never leave my side

stay with me all my life

all my life

Author's Note

all reviews are welcome

Reviews

[Amit Parmessur]

You write well friend.

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Beautiful.......... such a romantic sentiment to whom you write for. :-)

[Li Li]

This was so elegant. You found that place where the heart and mind speak together, instead of against one another. I admire the way you are able to put forth emotion. It was easy for the reader to get involved, and understand. I even like the way you formatted it in italics. Gave it an extra addition of almost a whisper.

The only thing I see that could maybe be transitioned is the last line of the first stanza. I would word it "i would be nothing without you". It would flow a little bit better. The apostrophe in "wouldn't" kind of adds a pause where one doesn't need to be.

It takes a lot for a writer to be able to fully explain how they feel. Especially when it's related to love. That's such a sensitive emotion. The blend with love and religion.... that was the master-like tactic there.

Very much enjoyed. Thank you for sharing. :O}

Much love!

[Deborah Leah Krempa]

Very wonderfully written poem. Enjoyed reading very much. Thank you for sharing. Debileah

[Dani California]

This is a beautiful poem Albert. Truly. Very heartfelt and romantic. Lovely!

[Nely Amorim]

it's beautiful Al :) i hope your darkness wasn't too dark xxx